Bearing in mind that you seem to have enough proofreaders, I’ll refrain from error hunting.
16 Aug 04 1:05 PM
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Though I'm always happy to get them. Well, maybe not *happy* but grateful for the attention. I'm still digesting DL7's incredible write up on the earlier chapters.
I have to say the scene where Denethor prepares Isilmo for departure is in my (humble) opinion, the best written sequence I’ve read in a very long time. .. It was strongly in character; the sarcasm laced with insults befitted Denethor very well. A+ work on the entire homecoming sequence!
It was a giggle to write, I'll admit. Denethor has a very wicked sense of humor that tends to come out most when in Maiaberiel's company. I have another scene in an upcoming chapter that I think you'll like. With the siblings, there is always this balance between how much they loathe each other and a very real enjoyment of matching wits. If they did get along, I would fear for all of Middle-earth...
I was also struck by Thorongil and Denethor’s theological discussion and Denethor’s internal dialogue in response to Thorongil’s optimism. While Thorongil speaks, Denethor finds his heart almost believing, but the inevitable silence that follows fills him again with doubt.
Where is there hope in the face of Sauron's return? It is both an philosophical and a physical problem, and Thorongil is the answer in each case. But he can't say anything directly (or so he thinks) so Denethor is left in doubt. The next chapter has another discussion like this. Denethor's doubt , how he tries to answer it and how this affects his relations with Thorongil, is a constant theme in HotK. Denethor does find hope, of a kind. It is not precisely *false* hope, but too fragile to bear up.
I'm so glad you are enjoying the story.
I'm working on both my newest first-draft chapter (the wedding!) and a rewrite of chapter 14. With luck, they will both be done by the end of the month. Lyllyn has asked for a character appendix, which is (slooooowly) in the works.
Thanks for your comments!
Toodles - Ang