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Sauron recounts the first human sacrifice in the temple of Armenelos.

MEFA 2009 Winner; First Place Villains.

Rated Adult for mature concepts, imagery and expletive language (single word).

Thanks to oshun, Jael and Ignoble Bard for their encouragement. ETA: And thanks to Raksha for some logistical tweaking.



Chapter List

Ch# Title Words Com. Updated
1 Downfallen 2,928 2 31 May 10
Appx. Word Count 2,928 2  



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Lissa - 29 Aug 08 - 11:57 AM

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A frightening look into the mind of one who would use his victim's loyalty and love as a weapon against him, who would twist the minds of those greedy for power or eternal life and use them for his own purposes.

Wonderfully crafted story!


DKP - 10 Sep 08 - 4:43 PM

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I read this by chance a few weeks ago but wasn't able to reply at the time. The descriptions and characterizations are excellent: certain scenes and emotions are still etched indelibly in my mind. Sauron's perverted use of religion is very well portrayed. I also loved the hints of backstory that flash through and make a reader eager to learn more about your vision of him - his relationship with Morgoth, a woman that apparently moved him (Luthien?) - as well as the foreshadowing (literally!) provided by the sudden clouds.

Brilliant interpretation! Thank you for sharing.


pandemonium_213 - 10 Sep 08 - 5:53 PM

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Lissa, oshun & DKP,

Thanks so much for reading this and for your most welcome comments.  If you found this chilling, then I have done my job as a writer.   In The Lord of the Rings, Tolkien appropriately wrote the Dark Lord as a menacing but largely unseen presence.  However, delving into The SilmarillionThe History of Middle-earth (esp. "Myths Transformed"), The Letters of JRRT, and Parma Eldalamberon 17 reveals a more complex character.  Thus, my interpretation is of a more "humanized," although still reprehensible, villain.

And thanks, GA, for the rec! 


pandemonium_213 - 05 Jun 10 - 8:07 AM

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Thanks muchly, Ziggy.  The vast majority of my writing is archived elsewhere, so it's a pleasant surprise to find a compliment like yours here on HASA.  Glad to hear this worked for you!

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Story Information

Author: pandemonium_213

Status: General

Completion: Complete

Era: Akallabêth/Last Alliance

Genre: Drama

Rating: Adult

Last Updated: 05/31/10

Original Post: 08/17/08

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