Loudwater: 1. Loudwater

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1. Loudwater

Drift of rain or drift of snow; trickling down rock, seeping through stone . . . welling as springs into sunlight.  Babble over boulders long-rounded by my passage--placid in pools where trout lurk, sharp-eyed for prey--the rushing fall over ledges stubborn to last, steps down towards rushy swan-pools.  Far, far to go, carrying news of the land to the Sea.

The Master's foreboding clots and clogs my current.  Neat hooves cleave me at the Ford--then foul, foundered feet of black nags.  White-maned waves scour my bed clean of their touch, preserving the haven of the Mariner's son.


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Story Information

Author: Adaneth

Status: Reviewed

Completion: Complete

Era: 3rd Age - Ring War

Genre: General

Rating: General

Last Updated: 01/29/09

Original Post: 02/27/08

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Freyalyn - 28 Feb 08 - 1:59 AM

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Oh, I like this. I realised what you were describing on the second reading.

"foul, foundered feet" - must remember this.

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arelenriel - 28 Feb 08 - 12:36 PM

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Excellent poem and it describes the Bruinen wonderfully.

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DKP - 29 Feb 08 - 8:24 PM

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This is gorgeously descriptive, Adaneth. I had such clear, shimmering images in my mind of the river, and the events at the Ford are perfectly played out from this PoV.

I love how you tied in Ulmo's use of the water (carrying news of the land to the Sea) and Elrond's own familial tie to the Sea.

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Adaneth - 03 Mar 08 - 12:58 PM

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Thank you, Freyalyn, Arelenriel, and DKP, for those kind words about my drabble.  You all just want me to write more short pieces, don't you?  Wink

I love how you tied in Ulmo's use of the water (carrying news of the land to the Sea) and Elrond's own familial tie to the Sea.

Just can't get away from that, can I? Grin  (I would have gotten back to you all sooner, but I was wandering the strand, feeding my Muse.)

Cheers--

Adaneth

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Elena Tiriel - 10 Apr 08 - 7:00 PM

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Hi Adaneth,

This drabble is such a treat that I re-read it at every opportunity -- and I was pleased to see it featured on the HASA front page....

I've commented on it before, but please bear with me while I burble on again.... LOL!

The most surprising part is the PoV: what an inventive idea! And your Bruinen indeed has much to say.

Starting with "Drifts of rain or drifts of snow" is brilliant; it's just water, not even coalescing into a rivulet yet, or emerging as springs... yet it is already a conscious, sentient entity.

The language is so picturesque and evocative, I could almost feel the Bruinen's revulsion at being sullied by the feet of the Nazgûl horses.

I love how Elrond is referred to, as simply the Master or the Mariner's son... the river is busy taking messages to Ulmo, and so is privy to the more mythic aspects of Elrond's background.

And "Haven of the Mariner's son" is a perfect example of the many layers of meaning you put into this, suggesting Eärendil's ports of call as well as directly describing Imladris.

Sorry for the relatively inarticulate babbling, but I just had to let you know how much I enjoy reading Loudwater. I have added it to my Inspiring Drabbles playlist... and I'd like to subvert your muse, er, encourage you to write more drabbles in the future, since you clearly have such a talent for the form.

- Barbara

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Adaneth - 14 Apr 08 - 6:27 AM

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. . . and I'd like to subvert your muse, er, encourage you to write more drabbles in the future, since you clearly have such a talent for the form.

Coming from you, Elena Tiriel, this is praise indeed.  I'm glad you enjoyed my first sally to much.  But you're not the one who has to live with the increasingly impatient Dwarves--and Ranger--in my head!  Wink  I need to get everyone home to Habad, so their stories can continue to unfold.

I think it's safe to say that I will probably write more drabbles at some point, whenever the Muse is taken that way.  I do have another short in mind, but have to get the cycle to the proper place for it to be told.

Cheers--

Adaneth

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Larner - 15 Jul 08 - 8:40 PM

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Again a joy to read, and such a wonderful response to Imhiriel's challenge.

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Adaneth - 21 Jul 08 - 10:57 AM

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Again a joy to read, and such a wonderful response to Imhiriel's challenge.

Thank you, Larner!

Now, if you'll excuse me, I had better get back to convincing Veylin to share the next scene in my current story with me . . . .  Wink

Cheers--

Adaneth

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Freyalyn - 15 Dec 08 - 12:31 AM

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This reads aloud wonderfully.  Lovely piece of work.  Thank you.

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Playlists Featuring the Story

Inspiring Drabbles - 15 stories - Owner: Elena Tiriel
Elena Tiriel's favorite drabbles (vignettes of precisely 100 words), drabble multiples, or drabble series from Tolkien fanfic; a very personal and eclectic list of drabbles at HASA that have touched me in some way. See Inspiring Stories for a list of favorite stories of other types.
Included because: A vignette told from the point of view of the River Bruinen; the river's voice is stunningly evocative and fitting.

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