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Unto the ending of the world

helga - 16 Oct 13 - 10:54 PM

Ch. 37: Fire

Oh my - what an exciting chapter!  Those Corsairs!  Seems like a pretty good strategy to cut off the Elves' one means of escape, if that's the point?

Along with the surprises and excitement, I really like how you very nicely mix in a bit of reflection (Elrohir mentally apologizing for his Choice) and  the hopeful thoughts that appear in spite of the situation:  "He wondered what Bilbo would make of the encounter – and I hope I will have the chance to tell him." Very nice work setting the mood at the start of the chapter, where Elrohir is taking a rather leisurely pace, figuring there's no need to hurry and wishing he was engaged in something more important , when the reader knows he' s  about to get his wish, big time....

And, also the humor: "Only had Denethor sent his own son and the Prince of Dol Amroth could he have sent a higher-ranking delegation. Only had he come himself would this delegation have been more difficult to deal with. "   The description of impatient Cirdan  getting ready for battle...

Well, I'm just glad Elrohir didn't have to shoot the horse.  Shades of Bill the Pony...  

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Unto the ending of the world

Nath - 17 Oct 13 - 9:48 AM

Ch. 37: Fire

Hi Helga Wave

Seems like a pretty good strategy to cut off the Elves' one means of escape, if that's the point?

It's certainly part of the point... And I suspect Elrohir has a long walk or a slow ride ahead of him to try to get back home.

It was a toss-up whether Cirdan would be trying to armour up over a nightshirt, or this; but I decided it was more likely he sleeps commando and put on trousers before rushing to the wall. And now I can't unsee the nightshirt... Laugh out loud

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