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In Empty Lands

Freyalyn - 30 Oct 08 - 3:21 AM

Ch. 3: Be By Him

Wonderful!  Thank you.

 I particulary liked the way you moved from Boromir looking at the swanboat bedhead to his memory of Faramir, and the conversation between them was perfect.  Your dialogue is excellently written, very much in Tolkien's own style - so many authors fall into the trap of 'modern' speech patterns, or worse, into 'cod' archaicisms.

And his little thought at the end...

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In Empty Lands

Larner - 10 Nov 08 - 2:36 AM

Ch. 3: Be By Him

I thank you, Freyalyn.  That headboard should have brought thoughts of home and Dol Amroth and his brother....  And i do try to keep each people's speech appropriate to that people and Tolkien's own usages when possible.  And I'm glad the argument and discussion apparently feels right to you.  Raksha did ask for an angry Faramir, after all, and this was what came of that request!

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