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A Bit of Rope

Larner - 17 Sep 10 - 5:10 PM

Ch. 12: Passage South

I so love not only Frodo giving Gandalf what-for, but Sam doing the same to Frodo!  The Wizard is right--Frodo has excellent companions!  And love that there is a chance for at least one of the Hobbits to rest for a day each time.

But I still worry that Gollum is not part of the quest.

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A Bit of Rope

Glîrnardir - 15 Jun 11 - 3:19 PM

Ch. 12: Passage South

Dear Aiwendiel,
I like your story very, very, very, very much.
However, I have a little criticism. I understand that its goal is probably to explain better the different personalities and choices of the characters, but I think it slows down the narration.
And, by the way, I don't like the Gandalf that you paint in this chapter: the meddler, nosy old man that influences so many fates and so many people... I hate the way he chooses to sacrificate other beings to serve the greater purpose and, most of all, I hate his betrayal of Frodo and his choice to not reveal him too much information at once. I know, in Middle-earth many consider him to be a meddler, but this is exaggerated!
Do not take my counsel amiss, because you're a far better writer than what I'll ever be. My compliments! :)

Riccardo.

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Glîrnardir - 15 Jun 11 - 3:21 PM

Ch. 12: Passage South

Excuse me, my comment was referred to Chapter 10: Words Unspoken.

Riccardo

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