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Scarlet10 - 19 Apr 10 - 2:59 AM

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I find this story very interesting. I am looking forward to see how the relations among the different parts of this group evolve.

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Casso - 10 May 10 - 4:35 PM

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Hi Ziggy,

Thanks for this great story.

I am looking forward to seeing how it unravels.  You have some very deep undercurrents taking place.

Your fight scene was very good. I would almost like to see something like this, but I think in reality it would be a little too scary. Especially between two who you count friends and family. After all it was enough to leave Aragorn frozen to the spot. 

Keep writing. 

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heartvodka - 23 Jun 10 - 2:28 PM

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Well, where to begin?

I've just found this and I'm so glad I did. From early on it was easy to see that there were some rather frightening themes emerging that could easily have become very out of character and completely unbelievable. But the handling of Elrohir's emotional state and the reasoning behind it is very carefully organised, making it believable and heart-achingly awful. I don't know if I'm reading too much into this but the discourse on the elven history of the orcs and then the sudden switch you have at one point to Elrohir and his dangerous perceptions seems very meaningful.

I love as well the way you have such a sensory laden writing style, which protrays the horrific nature of war and slavery that's often glossed over but also more gentle, beautiful snippets. The handling of the 'moment' between Elladan and Legolas was exquisite with the added, so very elven, touch of their, sort of, awareness of each other, if you get what I mean. I can't believe the misunderstanding! Where on earth will things go from here? I'm feeling a fair amount of trepidation for when/if Legolas remembers clearly what Elrohir did in the cabin.

Your weaving in of canon seems effortless!

Just generally, I love it and have no idea how it will turn out, particularly with these latest developments. Oh, it could go so many ways!

Can hardly wait for the next chapter!

Jessie

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Tanis - 15 Jul 10 - 8:46 PM

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So ... I don't read WIPs for this very reason; I get caught up in a story that comes to a screeching halt in the middle of some heart-wrenching scene and then I have to wait!  And I'm soooo not good at waiting!   

What an incredible emotional roller coaster this story has been.  I was immediately sucked in, just knowing the story would feature the twins.  And your portrayal of them is engrossing to say the least. The darkness so intensely and vividly portrayed in Elrohir, balanced, when necessary, by Ellandan's cool blue is equisitely done.  And I love that you've made Legolas such a strong character, yet vulnerable both to those he loves and those he desires.  And then you had me laughing out loud at Gandalf's mild disapproval of the Elf's ... impartiality.  Grin

I've run the gambit of emotions reading this and enjoyed every second of it.  Can't wait for more!

Tanis

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Tanis - 02 Sep 10 - 8:13 AM

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Going into withdrawal here - have now read the story to date about ten times.  Need more soonest.  I promise to send feedback for every chapter from here on out.

Who, me? Tanis

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eliza61 - 17 Nov 10 - 9:06 AM

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Am I the only one seeing only 21 chapters

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curiouswombat - 17 Nov 10 - 1:02 PM

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Eliza61 - no I have the same problem.  I'm guessing Ziggy has forgotten to click something... and hoping she'll rectify it soon!Oh Well

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ziggy - 06 Dec 10 - 12:47 AM

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Thank you for your reviews, Azalais. Yes, that chapter is the axis really for everything else that happens- and sort of ends the affair that was started in the earlier story. But it is for the better, for Eomer certainly- he is king now and Legolas knows this. I wonder what you will make of the next chapter- I really like that one.

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Cuinwen - 06 Dec 10 - 10:14 PM

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Generally I don't care for slash for the same reasons I don't generally care for het romances:  the attraction is too often substituted for plot.  But I have to admit, this is one rip-snorter of a tale you have going here :)

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ziggy - 09 Dec 10 - 10:34 PM

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Hi Tanis

Alos posted on Lord of the Rings Fanfiction- but I am behind there but have added some extras to DTB and this. Not a huge amount but little scenes here and there. 

I like your analogy for Legolas of a flame buffeted by the winds of war- he is certainly getting that in full at the moment. I think the Nazgul moment in the film, ROTK were so immensely powerful I wanted to make a bit more of them in these later chapters -and they were sorcerors themselves before Ringwraiths so would have used magic and corrupted the Song many times before. This chapter is only part of their plan. Next chapter you will find out a bit more.

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firefoot - 11 Dec 10 - 1:11 PM

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I've just sat here and read it all in one exhilarating go (my essays ... XD) and oh my god, this is brilliant -- I like how you've taken certain liberties with the book's plot but pattern it close enough that it's exciting to see how you've changed it. Um, the twins. The twins! Oh, Elrohir. ))): I just wish someone could magic him into the 21st century and get him a therapist, then send him back to the Song-bearing bosom of Legolas. ...that sounded better in my head. uh, anyway. Speaking of which, I really like how you've described the respective elves' songs and how you weave intuition so nicely into everything, like Pippin's Foreboding Feelings and such. Things that stand out from that mad rush of reading: Elrohir explaining the sea-longing to Gimli in those terms (bias? what bias?), the bits with the hobbits in, Legolas's ridiculous songs, Faramir's cameo :D:D:D, Gimli in general ... I could go on and on, really.

And this last chapter was absolutely mad -- but in a good way! I was literally gripping the edge of my table and forcing myself to breathe while reading it, because holy shit!

This has been a great ride and I can't wait for more!

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PandaBandit69 - 03 Jun 11 - 8:33 PM

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ziggy, this i must say is fantastic! I love how you have woven such an incredible adventure for our heroes, and yet still keeping with the original story. This is truly a fantastic piece.

I also am a great fan of the prequel, but was so excited to read this one i forgot to mention so in the last story XD Truly I hope to read more of your work inthe near future.Wink

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AndreaH - 01 Sep 11 - 3:30 PM

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Hello, I started reading this on my small piece of Apple technology over summer holidays, but couldn't comment as I couldn't write on HASA from that particular piece of technology. I really like your Gimli, he is wonderful, and the relationship between he and Legolas is a lot of fun to read. But I am somewhat misbelieving, if Elrohir has been this tormented for how long?, how did he ever manage to form a decent, brotherly relationship with Aragorn? If Glorfindel takes so little nonsense then why didn't he, if not Elrond or Elladan, or even Arwen, force the issue with Elrohir? Surely someone beside Elladan saw what bad shape Elrohir was in?

Anyway, I'm slowly catching up (Chapter 18 is next) and will soon come to know, once again, the agony of reading a work in progress Laugh out loud. Keep up the good work!

BTW, do we ever hear from Legolas' dragon? The wise one might have many things to say, as Legolas has speculated...

Thanks, AndreaH

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ziggy - 05 Nov 11 - 12:10 PM

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Sorry folks- not a new chapter, just I edited something so the next chapter doesn't jar. There are two new chapters in the pipeline though and they'll be up soon.

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curiouswombat - 14 Apr 10 - 3:29 PM

Ch. 1: Keeping Watch

Thank you for letting me know that you have started to post this - I have battled my way through the new layout to find it, and it has not disappointed. 

I find the relationships between the Fellowship, the Rangers, and the Sons of Elrond fascinating as you write them; the sense of distrust between the groups is very believable - more realistic than tales where everyone is everyone else's bosom friend!

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Azalais - 23 Nov 10 - 4:57 AM

Ch. 1: Keeping Watch

Have only just started on this story, after having it on my To Read list for a long time - and I don't think it's going to disappoint. Legolas is one of my favourite characters - as are Gimli and the Peredhil come to that - and I can already see that with all the tensions and emotions you're setting up, this is going to get really interesting.

I also love the wealth of realistic detail and description - at last, a M-e fic in which people actually need the loo!

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thelauderdale - 05 Jun 11 - 6:09 PM

Ch. 1: Keeping Watch

I read your previous story for the MEFAs, and now I am finally reading this one.  It pops up every time I do a search for Orc fic [glares at the summary] so I guess it is high time I do so, whether it actually contains Orcs or not. Tongue out

BTW, thanks for the footnotes.  As I said, I did read the earlier story but the refresher was appreciated.

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Azalais - 27 Nov 10 - 6:42 AM

Ch. 2: Standing together

So much to like in this chapter. Still loving your Gimli-and-Legolas, the black humour and the mixture of irritation and affection - that rings very true, as do Legolas' mercurial changes of mood. Gorgeous description of him catching the first hint of (I assume) the Sea...

Poor Elrohir, though. That vivid and visceral description of his dream made it very clear just what a burden of memory he's carrying. Very intrigued to see where this goes next...

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curiouswombat - 02 May 10 - 8:53 AM

Ch. 3: Chapter three:Black Ships

As is usual with your writing I feel as if I am there with them - I can hear the sounds, smell the smells.  I feel very, very, sorry for Elrohir - for every possibility of pleasure to become a reminder of horror in that way.

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Scarlet10 - 03 May 10 - 6:19 AM

Ch. 3: Chapter three:Black Ships

I read the chapter, as soon as it arrived. And I am sorry to say it was too short Wink

That is to say, I liked what I read and it ended too soon.

Good things do end fast, don't they? :-)

Thank you.

More please?

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Azalais - 27 Nov 10 - 7:05 AM

Ch. 3: Chapter three:Black Ships

Fantastic description, this chapter - so much action and tension which you draw the reader so vividly into. The way you write about combat is so effective - the sights and the sounds and the stenches - Gimli's axe and Legolas' whirling blades; we're right there in it.

I am also enjoying the way you keep using different observers' perspectives - be it Gimli or the freed Gondorian slaves - to show us the sheer unearthly difference of the Elves.

Wonderful, wonderful passage with Legolas listening to the Dead too - just little details like the fact that their armour looks archaic (yes, of course, it would!) And that he feels a historic connection with them - these are Men who might have seen his grandfather in battle; that had never occurred to me before and it's a wonderful idea. Their murmurings to Legolas are chilling, poetic, beautiful.

Wonderful chapter, well done again!

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Scarlet10 - 03 May 10 - 7:49 AM

Ch. 4: Lust

Thank you for this chapter.

I was worried for a minute that Elrohir will win, but I see I can trust you to keep Legolas' interests above all else.

I do hope there will not be a scene of sex between them. I resent Elrohir too much for it, at the moment.

And I expect some apologies, to Legolas. Seems like Aragorn has made the same mistake as in the council, and accused Legolas...

All in all, I loved this chapter, and this story.

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Imber - 03 May 10 - 1:28 PM

Ch. 4: Lust

I like the intensity of this - elves can't be cool and calm and all-knowing all the time! I'm looking forward to more.

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curiouswombat - 04 May 10 - 3:05 PM

Ch. 4: Lust

Gosh - that is a wonderful fight scene,  and most certainly not one that those who witnessed it would have enjoyed.  Bravo!

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Azalais - 28 Nov 10 - 12:27 AM

Ch. 4: Lust

Oh my goodness, that fight. Thrilling and terrible at the same time - and you manage to bring the two characters out so strongly through it. Legolas ice-cool; defending himself, yet only injuring Elrohir as much as he really has to - and Elrohir enraged. And then Legolas' moment of understanding and almost compassion when he looks into Elrohir's eyes.

I really like the contrast in fighting styles you bring out too, with Legolas turning the fact that he only has knives to his advantage, using their sound and the sunlight glinting off them, and using his speed and agility and ability to just... disappear out from under Elrohir's blade.

Bravo indeed! Can't wait till I have time to read the next chapter - I'm having to ration myself...

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thelauderdale - 07 Jun 11 - 6:29 PM

Ch. 4: Lust

Elves behaving badly.  Someone needs to give Elrond a clout.  Yes, I said Elrond.  500 years since the Redhorn Pass and he couldn't be bothered to get his kid into any kind of therapy?

Fascinating and horrible and sad to see how you have wound up this confusion/grief/lust/anger inside of Elrohir: one tangled knot of neuroses.  I'm not really sure why he is aiming it all at Legolas, though.  But I figure some revelation is forthcoming.  Unless it's all just so much bad timing: War-time stress, the culmination of centuries of frustration, turning something that might otherwise be mild to medium attraction into murderous obsession and a need for dominance.

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Imber - 08 May 10 - 1:35 PM

Ch. 5: Helcaraxe

This is getting better and better. Poor Aragorn - torn between his family and his friends!

You won't be able to update quickly enough for me - I hope you are poised over your keyboard this very minute...

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Olorimë - 21 May 10 - 4:30 AM

Ch. 5: Helcaraxe

Helcaraxe- the frozen wastes crossed by the Noldor in the Silmarillion (I have no idea how to put umlauts on letters on a Mac!!)

Alt + U

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Azalais - 29 Nov 10 - 10:39 AM

Ch. 5: Helcaraxe

I think I may be in love with your Gimli.

"for a moment, he felt the song of the Dwarf. It brushed his mind lightly, a sensation of the deep fires of earth, and then it was gone."

- just exquisite phrasing. And then this:

"He was a figure of patience, of stone, feet planted firmly on the good earth, his clever, subtle hand on the haft of his axe"

- it's just wonderful realisation of the character. The conversation he and Legolas have, about loyalty, about friendship, about overcoming prejudices, really brought a lump to my throat - and I do like the way you have them both use Arod as a proxy to avoid explicitly talking about how they feel about their friendship! Very neat!

Another chapter full of cracking dialogue and heightened emotion. Thank you!

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thelauderdale - 07 Jun 11 - 6:53 PM

Ch. 5: Helcaraxe

Must pause here to echo Azalais' righteous praise of your Gimli.  It's a wonderful characterization: my favorite aspect of this story so far.

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Azalais - 30 Nov 10 - 7:00 AM

Ch. 6: White Wings

The voices of the Dead in this chapter are chilling; litany is the perfect description for the hypnotic repetition of their murmurs.

Lovely image of Gimli sticking "like a burr" to Legolas - prickly and difficult, that's my Dwarf!

I'm also very struck by your descriptions of Aragorn having to control and hold in check the Shadow Host, which isn't  something I'd ever given much thought to - almost akin to his struggles to control the palantir; the tension you build up until the moment Aragorn calls them to fight made the hairs rise on the back of my neck.

Oh, Powers, that moment when the gull cries and Legolas is nearly lost - this reader nearly passed out! Don't do that!

(And why do I get the sneaking feeling that the Peredhel who carries Legolas from the battlefield might not be the one Gimli thinks it is?)

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thelauderdale - 07 Jun 11 - 7:06 PM

Ch. 6: White Wings

Ack!  Wrong brother!

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curiouswombat - 16 May 10 - 3:02 PM

Ch. 7: The Darkness Within

Oh Elrohir, what a dark path you walk, and in the walking harm yourself as much as others.

And Ziggy, what a complex tale you weave...

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Scarlet10 - 18 May 10 - 10:47 PM

Ch. 7: The Darkness Within

What exactly did happen to Elrohir back around his mother?

The hints take me to a very dark place, which makes me hope that I misunderstand something.

I do hope this will be revealed to us, the readers, and that Elrohir will not harm Legolas.

This last chapter made me shiver.

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Azalais - 30 Nov 10 - 10:48 AM

Ch. 7: The Darkness Within

Darkness, indeed. Elrohir is in a very, very bad way, isn't he?.. - love and hatred and desire and admiration all very badly mixed up.

This is a seriously disturbing chapter, but I know that's what you intended - rest assured the writing was more than powerful enough to have the desired effect!

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thelauderdale - 07 Jun 11 - 7:25 PM

Ch. 7: The Darkness Within

Elrohir is, indeed, acting more than his share of an Orc.

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Imber - 24 May 10 - 7:41 AM

Ch. 8: Aftermath

I'm relieved things between our heroes seem to be improving - I don't think I could take more darkness and angst you showed in the previous chapters. And I like angst.

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Azalais - 30 Nov 10 - 3:45 PM

Ch. 8: Aftermath

The plot continues to thicken... Still much darkness and pain, and yet the way you write about it is so lyrical. The passages describing the sea, the clouds and the gulls are beautiful.

Top marks too for bringing out the fact, which a lot of fanfic writers seem to get tripped up on, that Pelargir is not on the coast!

And I like the idea that Elrond's sons might know a little of the language of the Dwarves; after all, Elrond was a Dwarf-friend...

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ziggy - 30 May 10 - 2:04 PM

Ch. 9: Angren-pau (Iron-Fist)

sorry all- I have reposted this latest chapter because the format didn't work. Apologies to those who tried and couldnt read it. Ziggy

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curiouswombat - 30 May 10 - 3:43 PM

Ch. 9: Angren-pau (Iron-Fist)

Ah - good stuff.

I want to take all three elves, and Aragorn, and hug them tightly.  Well, perhaps not too tightly for Legolas, due to his injury. 

Poor Elrohir, in particular - such dark guilt.

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Azalais - 30 Nov 10 - 4:00 PM

Ch. 9: Angren-pau (Iron-Fist)

So, now we come to the heart of Elrohir's damage. Very, very dark indeed, and I wonder how it can ever be healed...

Leavened nicely with some lovely Legolas/Gimli humour, and I did enjoy Glorfindel's description of Wood-Elves;

Glorfindel had snorted. 'When you've seen a Woodelf gut an Orc without a second glance, you know they aren't listening to flowers. And they can shoot a bat's eye in the dark.'


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thelauderdale - 08 Jun 11 - 5:40 AM

Ch. 9: Angren-pau (Iron-Fist)

It's a hideous shame that he didn't (or couldn't) get help for this earlier.  500 years is too effing long to let your psyche warp like this.

Though even when it first happened, and even knowing the wisdom of what Glorfindel had said about feelings in battle - those are *feelings*, which one would assume Glorfindel also told him need to be mastered. I'm pretty disturbed that he allowed himself to lose himself so badly in the first place.  What would he have done if it *had* been "some female Orc or some creature corrupted by darkness and Shadow?"

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curiouswombat - 31 May 10 - 4:51 AM

Ch. 10: In the Wind from the Sea

I love the vignette of Legolas with his father; I feel for his fears for his family all through these stories, ever since Saruman played with his mind so horrifically.

I think I, too, would be fascinated by your Legolas' tattoos.

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Imber - 31 May 10 - 1:52 PM

Ch. 10: In the Wind from the Sea

Thanks for posting these chapters. I can cope with the angst now after the brief rest since the last batch.

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eliza61 - 02 Jun 10 - 1:12 PM

Ch. 10: In the Wind from the Sea

Well now, that's was unexpected. Grin but very much enjoyed.  Now, will Legolas & Elladan get to explore this unexpected development? 

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Azalais - 02 Dec 10 - 4:12 PM

Ch. 10: In the Wind from the Sea

Wonderful image of Legolas in the crows-nest, leaning out into the air - I can see him there and smell the salt and the spray! And I loved the description of him sliding at breakneck speed back down the rigging.

I do like the lightheartedness and the mercuriality and teasing of your Legolas - that seems exactly right to me; but then so does his innate kindliness and compassion.

As for the scene in the cabin with Elrohir - mmmm. Gosh, it's warm in here all of a sudden. (You spoilsport, interrupting them like that!) And yes, like curiouswombat, I would love a closer look at those tattoos...

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Azalais - 02 Dec 10 - 4:14 PM

Ch. 10: In the Wind from the Sea

... Sorry, meant the scene in the cabin with *Elladan*.  Hmmm, was that a Freudian slip on my part?

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Imber - 19 Jun 10 - 10:43 AM

Ch. 11: The Hunger

I read this quickly and then had to read it again (such hardship!) so that I knew which was Elladan and which Elrohir. You are tangling things - actions and feelings - so well. Ready for the next now.

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Azalais - 04 Dec 10 - 3:33 PM

Ch. 11: The Hunger

Fascinating and vivid detail of the surgery in this chapter - and again I love your Gimli and his unselfish, reasonable common sense.

And then - you do like torturing Elves, don't you? To say nothing of your readers! Very dark and very difficult, but very thrilling. I'm not sure which of the three I feel for most and am intrigued to see where you're ultimately taking this aspect of the plot!

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Narya - 20 Jun 12 - 3:15 PM

Ch. 11: The Hunger

Hi Ziggy!  I decided I couldn't wait for you to finish posting over at Faerie, so I've come to read Sons of Thunder here, now that I have an account :)

This was a wonderful chapter, full of tension and subtle character dynamics.  I loved that Legolas and Gimli weren't quite sure which twin was which, and the intricate details you give about the operation are mesmerising; do you have a medical background, or is it the product of lots of research?  Either way, fabulous job.  I look forwards to reading more.

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curiouswombat - 19 Jun 10 - 3:18 PM

Ch. 12: The Battle of the Pelennor Fields

Oh my - I have just read the two chapters together and what strong chapters they are.  The surgery so well described, the confusion so often caused by the identical twins so well written, with such consequences, and then that battle scene.  What an excellent battle scene - I could feel the differing emotions of all concerned, and smell the blood, the gore, the mud, the fear...

Well written indeed.

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Erulisse - 20 Jun 10 - 12:05 PM

Ch. 12: The Battle of the Pelennor Fields

Wonderfully crafted.  Battle is never as easy to describe as people think, but you made the grit, blood and exhaustion come through.  I hope that the three elves manage to reach an understanding soon - angst makes for a good story, but it's hell to live through.  Can't wait for the next chapter, or two, or four.....

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Imber - 20 Jun 10 - 1:38 PM

Ch. 12: The Battle of the Pelennor Fields

This is so sad - Elladan realising how Aragorn (and Arwen) will be lost to him, the death of Halbarad, Aragorn's self-reproach, the terrible misunderstandings between the elves and Legolas's loneliness. I hope the promised 'Many Meetings' help them all feel better.

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Azalais - 04 Dec 10 - 3:37 PM

Ch. 12: The Battle of the Pelennor Fields

Such vivid description again all through this chapter - aboard ship, on the battlefield. I love seeing the events of the Pelennor from different perspectives.

And you made me think in a way I never have before about the Peredhil losing Aragorn as well as Arwen - that anticipated loss, and their simultaneous grief at and acceptance of it, was really moving, and reminded me very much that they are indeed Elrond's sons...

If I had a tiny nitpick it would be that I think Mumakil is plural, and that the singular is Mumak.

Still loving this story!

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curiouswombat - 26 Jun 10 - 6:22 AM

Ch. 13: Chapter 13: Many Meetings

Oh cruel dwarf! 

I am glad that Legolas was there to give some comfort to Éomer.

I am also hoping, now, that Legolas finds someone suitable to resole his boots before he has to walk further in them...

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Imber - 27 Jun 10 - 7:51 AM

Ch. 13: Chapter 13: Many Meetings

I thought at first that you'd decided to go more AU and kill off Eowyn and Gimli. The relief when I realised you hadn't made this chapter seem positively light-hearted compared with the previous one.

I loved the last section where both Legolas and Gimli let the other know his love for him.

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Erulisse - 27 Jun 10 - 4:07 PM

Ch. 13: Chapter 13: Many Meetings

And he hadn't even yet started on Aragon....  Oh, this is precious.  The reactions of battle's aftermath, the joy and the sorrow, are beautifully realized here.  The friendship of one Dwarf and a particular Elf are also understood and realized here.  Wonderful!  More please....

Erulisse (one L)

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Azalais - 04 Dec 10 - 3:45 PM

Ch. 13: Chapter 13: Many Meetings

Gorgeous images and description again - the carrion crows settling like black cinders; all the quiet, stunned flatness of the aftermath of battle. And then Imrahil coming dazzling into frame ;-)

I do like the mixture of pathos and humour too, both between the Peredhil and Aragorn and Imrahil, and then between Legolas and Gimli at the end. I was pleased both with the teasing between those two, and your bringing out of the fact that Gimli realised he had overstepped the mark - though he'd die rather than admit it!

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curiouswombat - 04 Jul 10 - 12:34 PM

Ch. 14: Ravëyon

Wow!  What a rush of emotions - I can't really begin to say anything all that sensible - like both Elrohir and Legolas I am overwhelmed.  Nazgul!  And Elrohir - don't listen!  And meep!  And... Elo!

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Erulisse - 05 Jul 10 - 4:54 AM

Ch. 14: Ravëyon

Wonderful use of the Nazgul in this chapter.  Now please, be kind and let Elrohir and Legolas finally get together?  Any what about that ever-bleeding chest wound?  That also needs to be resolved.  Guess I'll have a lot more reading still to go ROTFLMAO

- Erulisse (one L)

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eliza61 - 07 Jul 10 - 12:04 PM

Ch. 14: Ravëyon

What a great chapter.  Lot's of emotions, fresky elves and a Nazgul thrown in.   Some one once said that there's a thin line between love and hate.  Let's see if Elrohir and Legolas can figure out which one they are feeling, before they kill each other.  Very well written.  post soon

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Azalais - 05 Dec 10 - 1:06 AM

Ch. 14: Ravëyon

I really enjoy the way you describe Legolas' ability to hear and sense the inner Songs both of people (Elladan, Elrohir, and how different they are), and also of things: the stones of the City and the song they sing to Legolas of Gondor and its past, and the gorgeous line "Star-song chimed, metallic and distant". Very Elven.

So many convincing little details, like the "sounds of the night" outside the tent.

I was right there with Legolas menaced by the Nazgul, feeling all that black malignity - and the impossibility of keeping out of your mind the thing you know you must not think of...brrr. And then Elrohir like something out of First Age legend confronting it. And the Nazgul in his head too.. the visions it shows Elrohir could be very fandom-cliched, but I think you handle them deftly enough - and we know they're a dark fantasy - to get away with it...

And oh dear, what's going to become of poor Elrohir now the Dark Lord's been in his head?

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Gandalfs apprentice - 10 Jul 10 - 9:45 AM

Ch. 15: Olórin

This is gripping! Wow, who knew about all that drama going on behind Tolkien's battle scenes.

I couldn't stop reading. Don't leave us waiting for Legolas's fate too long!

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curiouswombat - 10 Jul 10 - 1:57 PM

Ch. 15: Olórin

Oh dear - I fear, now, what Gandalf's plan may be...

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Erulisse - 11 Jul 10 - 4:54 PM

Ch. 15: Olórin

The thought of what more Legolas might be made to suffer freezes my blood.  By the time this ends, he deserves at least one time of true love with one of the Sons, or both of them.  But deserves doesn't always happen...  Please don't keep us hanging...

- Erulisse (one L)

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Azalais - 05 Dec 10 - 3:28 PM

Ch. 15: Olórin

Oh, noooo - what are you going to do to my poor Elf now?

(Wonderfully in-character Gandalf, though: tetchy and wise, kindly but ruthless as needed. "Corporeality had its compensations", indeed. Heh.)

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eliza61 - 16 Jul 10 - 5:49 AM

Ch. 16: Awakening

Whew, now that was intense.  Legolas must surely be cursing Eomer's bad timing.  Great Chapter ziggy, well done writing Elrohirs emotions.  I swear I could imagine every single one.  He has got to be exhausted though going from rage to lust to love to joy and then jealousy. 

He's going to need some valium before this quest is over.  Wink

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Tanis - 16 Jul 10 - 7:05 AM

Ch. 16: Awakening

Legolas is not the only  tease here, Ziggy! 

It's a good thing I have a great job where they don't care what I do so long as I get my work done!  I could not resist the siren call of the chapter and was richly rewarded for my truancy!  The moment of clarity for Elrohir's song was glorious!

I will never, ever, ever start reading another WIP though;  I share Elrohir's agony!

Tanis 

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curiouswombat - 16 Jul 10 - 11:30 AM

Ch. 16: Awakening

I, too, could feel all the emotions that swirled throughout this chapter  - you write them so well.   And, yet again, I want to take all three and comfort them.

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Imber - 18 Jul 10 - 10:49 AM

Ch. 16: Awakening

How much more angst can you pour over these characters? and you do it so well.

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Azalais - 05 Dec 10 - 3:36 PM

Ch. 16: Awakening

That lyrical, gorgeous description of the Song - and then poor Eomer! Poor all of them! I so hope this is going to end well, somehow, eventually, because even I can only take so much angst...

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curiouswombat - 26 Jul 10 - 1:57 PM

Ch. 17: Chapter 17: Olorin's Plan

Oh my goodness - Gandalf!   How could you?  I know, greater good and all that... but, but...

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Erulisse - 27 Jul 10 - 4:00 AM

Ch. 17: Chapter 17: Olorin's Plan

Ziggy - Another fine chapter in the tale.  And a twist - WHAT a twist.  Despair will be all too easily found for all of the players in this game.  It is a good thing you are going on holiday at the same time as I am - if you posted a new chapter while I was unable to read it right away.....well - better left unsaid <g>.  ROTFLMAO

- Erulisse (one L)

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Azalais - 07 Dec 10 - 3:46 PM

Ch. 17: Chapter 17: Olorin's Plan

Legolas waved a chicken leg at Aragorn. 'If you recall, we didn't know there would be a council. That only happened by chance.

Thank you! Over and over again in this fic, you get little details like that right, which so many fanfic authors get wrong (and I include Peter Jackson as guilty on that particular one!) - the apparently-chance nature of everyone's arrival at Rivendell was so important, and yet it's often overlooked.

Another great Gimli-and-Legolas chapter. I feel so sorry for Aragorn putting up with the two of them: and then this lovely line:

Even now, Gandalf expected to see his tongue peek from the corner of his mouth as he concentrated… and here, in no time at all, was the Man who would be King.

And then you make Aragorn agree to... well, that. You are an Evil Author, you know that, don't you?...

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thelauderdale - 15 Jun 11 - 6:38 AM

Ch. 17: Chapter 17: Olorin's Plan

My favorite thing about this chapter: Gimli and Legolas' needling, loving interactions with one another.  And I know you've heard this time and again, but I really enjoy your interpretation of Legolas.  He is, indeed, a maddening Elf.

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curiouswombat - 03 Sep 10 - 1:05 PM

Ch. 18: Cake and ale and smoke

Light and fluffy perhaps - but there is certainly an undercurrent of sadness;  it is almost as if the four Fellowship members in the chapter are all trying to be bright and cheerful for each other...

And we still have Gandalf's plan underlying all, along with the inter-elven relationships... I wonder what gives me the feeling this is just a wee interlude in the angst?  Oh Well

Excellent chapter though!

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Tanis - 03 Sep 10 - 8:32 PM

Ch. 18: Cake and ale and smoke

Whoooohoooooo!  I'm currently at Dragon Con, but this was the first thing I opened when I got back to the room tonight!  Thank you, Ziggy!!!!!! 

Lovely transition from the intensity of the last chapter to this lighter little feast for these senses.  The foreshawdowing for Legolas is well done, indeed!  And it was delightful to see the visit from the elf and the dwarf cheered up Merry enough that even Pippin felt better. 

How I wish I could read the Silvan dialect and really *hear* the words of the song!  I just adore the personality you've given Legolas; I suspect that from henceforth, your's will be the standard I measure all Legolas stories by.

Thanks for the update, Ziggy!  I'm off to read the next chapter!

A gold star for you!A gold star for you!A gold star for you!A gold star for you!

Thumbs upThumbs up

Tanis

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Imber - 04 Sep 10 - 7:52 AM

Ch. 18: Cake and ale and smoke

This is the sort of chapter I love - the characters revealing more of themselves by chatting and generally living their lives. Tolkien gave us the dramatic outline but left so much out.

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Azalais - 07 Dec 10 - 3:55 PM

Ch. 18: Cake and ale and smoke

As curiouswombat said, it may be fluff but it's fluff with melancholy underlying it: they are all trying just a bit too hard to be cheerful...

Very bittersweet, and lovely for it. Honestly, what is that Elf like?...

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curiouswombat - 03 Sep 10 - 2:16 PM

Ch. 19: The Request

And how right I was, to remember that there was still Gandalf's plan...  Just at the moment I want to stuff his pipe right down his throat...

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eliza61 - 03 Sep 10 - 4:26 PM

Ch. 19: The Request

Wow, talk about a turn in the tone.  It's literally as if the clouds have cover up the sun.  even though you have warned us about the next chapter I hope there aren't too many elf-owies in store for Legolas.

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Tanis - 03 Sep 10 - 9:09 PM

Ch. 19: The Request

Oh golly, I know I'm repeating myself, but Legolas' ability to *hear* the pomp of Gondor in the stone, that he can amplify Eowyn's song, as he does for everyone he comes in contact with, is so beautifully done.  You've gifted him so he is as beautiful inside as out.

One of the best things, for me, about this story, is that I'm constantly surprised.  And one of the very best surprises was when Legolas got up out of bed to go make things right when he realized he had misread the tenor of the advances by both Elrohir and Elladan - two chapters back?  Or only one?   And here again, he's off to seek out those he feels he's wronged and make things right.  I love that about your characterization too.  Just exquisite! 

You do a great job of ratcheting up the tension, then taking us back down, only to run us up the flagpole again!  Not to mention closing a chapter at precisely the point where as a reader I'm begging shamelessly for more. 

Oh please, oh please don't leave me hanging another month before the next chapter posts.  And from here on out, I'm staying far, far away from WIPs.  This is killing me! 

I'm going to be very, very, very disappointed if you knock my socks off by actually killing the elf.  I live by the creedo, they must all be returned safe and sound to the shape you found them in when you started!  Wink

When can I expect more???????

Tanis

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Erulisse - 04 Sep 10 - 5:16 AM

Ch. 19: The Request

Tanis is not the only one who awaits new chapters in this tale.  And having two of them for me this morning made my day!

I am back on the edge of the precipice again with these two chapters.  A small amount of "normalcy" in an abnormal world, followed by an acceptance of an impossible and suicidal task by one whom I would hate to have slain.  I am on tenterhooks until this is resolved, and I may truly hate the ending.  But, keep on - it would be much harder NOT to know. 

- Erulisse (one L)

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Imber - 04 Sep 10 - 7:58 AM

Ch. 19: The Request

I hope you had a lovely holiday and have come back ready to write and write. You cannot leave us waiting at this point it's too cruel. I know writers like to have feedback as they go but I'm with Tanis on avoiding WIPs in future - it's too tantalising to wait in between chapters.

This one was lovely and heartbreaking and the Song motif works so well.

More asap, please.

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Azalais - 09 Dec 10 - 4:38 AM

Ch. 19: The Request

Such exquisite, beautiful writing all through this chapter that I want to cry. Everything about your Legolas feels so right - the way his light feet run and leap along the walls, his quick intelligence, the way he is "impossibly, irritatingly flirtatious" yet utterly serious about the Nazgul.  The line Legolas suddenly turned to Gandalf and beseeched, 'Let me believe a while that I might escape.' nearly broke my heart.

So many wonderful little details again - Legolas thinking he sees Boromir in the gardens (of course, he hasn't met Faramir yet!); the Music as Gandalf hears it; all Gandalf's smoke-rings, particularly the axe, bow and sword for the Three Hunters; Thranduil's joke about Bilbo's hat.

I don't know whether to laugh or cry. And I wonder whether I feel brave enough for the next chapter. ..

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Tanis - 12 Sep 10 - 2:09 PM

Ch. 20: Chapter 20: THe Gift of Men

Spoiler Alert - Don't read further if you haven't read this chapter-----

How deliciously ironic that Gandalf chooses one or both of the twins to carry out this mission, particularly when Elladan has come to the full-on recognition that Legolas is what he wants after all.  And now, it appears, he will have to make a choice between his brother or the one he loves.  Delecious indeed.  And heart wrenching. 

I cannot see through those low=scudding clouds of Mordor how this can have a happy ending, but me thinks there are still many chapters to go and you have such a wonderfully twisted mind I'm still Holding My Breath that my hopes will come true!

Yummy chapter, Ziggy.  And I already read it this morning over at ff.net.  Smile

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eliza61 - 13 Sep 10 - 9:07 AM

Ch. 20: Chapter 20: THe Gift of Men

Sweet Lord Ziggy.  Talk about guys with issues!!  I agree with Tanis, how in the world are these three going to be able to live with themselves let alone each other.

Very fine writing.  Elrohir's anger is unbelievable, almost to the point of madness.  Middle earth is going to need some serious pyschiatric help when this is over. LOL.

Now, I hope you update soon because you left us with an evil cliffie, at this point I would not be surprised if both Elrohir and legolas took a leap off a cliff.

Well done, mellon nin

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curiouswombat - 13 Sep 10 - 10:40 AM

Ch. 20: Chapter 20: THe Gift of Men

Oh My Goodness.  Ziggy  you know how to give us triple angst with a side order of extra strong angst...

And how will Gandalf find this meshing with his oh-so-clever plan?  Which could he trust to do the deed?  His is a stupid plan, anyway....Frown

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Imber - 14 Sep 10 - 12:57 PM

Ch. 20: Chapter 20: THe Gift of Men

I thought we'd had enough angst already and you just pile on more.I can barely cope with the intensity of it all. And they've got a war to fight at the same time as all this.

Please don't leave us waiting too long for more.

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Azalais - 09 Dec 10 - 5:49 AM

Ch. 20: Chapter 20: THe Gift of Men

Now at last Elladan's got to the heart of it. And I wonder whether, now the dire secret is out, Elrohir will be able to be healed - and whether, given the way he equates Legolas and Celebrian in his mind, Gandalf's plan is going to offer some opportunity for him to atone?

Poor, poor Legolas, and poor Elladan. But also poor Elrohir for the appalling situation he finds himself in. If you do manage to come out with any sort of happy ending that is convincing, from here,  I will heave a huge sigh of relief and take my virtual hat off to you!

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curiouswombat - 20 Oct 10 - 9:30 AM

Ch. 21: The Remains of the Fellowship

And now I want to weep for Gimli as well... and Elladan.

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Erulisse - 21 Oct 10 - 3:35 AM

Ch. 21: The Remains of the Fellowship

To have sat around that dinner table would have been to reside in the midst of a lightning storm.  I feel such sorrow for Gimly and Elladan when they discover that they are too late on the next morning.  More please....

- Erulisse (one L)

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eliza61 - 21 Oct 10 - 7:39 AM

Ch. 21: The Remains of the Fellowship

Congrats on the new job Ziggy,

Well done on this new chapter.  I love how this focuses on Gimili, He is so attuned into the fellowship. 

Not sure how I feel about Aragorn at this point.  I'm torn between wanting to smack him upside the head and feeling great sympathy for what he is allowing to happen.

That's what a good story will do, get you to feel for the characters.

update soon. 

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Tanis - 28 Oct 10 - 7:43 PM

Ch. 21: The Remains of the Fellowship

Me again! I had to put in my two cents over here as well. 

Because I've had so long to think about this between chapters now, I'm pre-plotting and very curious to see how much of what I've imagined comes true in the next chapter.  I can think of only one way to circumvent the fate that's been so exquisitely foreshadowed in the last three chapters - if, of course, there is to be any circumvention.  I'm hoping there is, ferverently praying there is.  Though I've had to stop holding my breath waiting for the next chapter to post. 

Dratted new job!  Should we get up a petition to send to your boss(es) for leinency in accomplishing your tasks until this story is done?  Less hours, same pay?  Better working conditions (i.e the ability to write at work;  internet access during the day; longer breaks ...)  Wink  How can we facilitate more hours in your day so you have time to write again?

Is it killing you to have all these ideas in your head and no time to sit at the keyboard and release some of that pressure building up?  How I wish there was something, anything I could do to help!  Admittedly, for selfish reasons - I neeeeeee more story.  You've created a junkie, I'm a basket case until my next fix!

Tanis

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Imber - 02 Nov 10 - 4:43 AM

Ch. 21: The Remains of the Fellowship

This is lovely - beautifully observed. You have raised the angst level yet again but in a wonderfully understated way.

I hope you have settled enough in your new job to enable you to keep writing!

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Azalais - 09 Dec 10 - 6:00 AM

Ch. 21: The Remains of the Fellowship

This is unbearable. Lunch will have to wait, I have to read the next chapter now - at least, coming to this story late, I don't have to wait for you to update!

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eliza61 - 19 Nov 10 - 5:53 AM

Ch. 22: Obsession

Wow, this chapter was interesting.  Much of the time Elrohir's characterization in fandom is slightly dark but pretty much a good guy.  this is a different, way more intense and definitely tortured Elrohir.    Forgive me but I can totally see him being corrupted by Sauron.

What's more is I'm not sure if I feel sorry for him or if I'm beginning to dislike him.  I will agree with his self assesment, he is  definitely being a fool.

Great development. 

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Tanis - 19 Nov 10 - 12:57 PM

Ch. 22: Obsession

Man, where to start?  My heart is still rampaging wildly inside my chest as I attempt to retreat frpm the mountain top where you've just left me.

Legolas' vulnerability throughout this chapter is heartbreaking.  I love that Elorhir has a *different* plan than Gandalf's, it gives me much hope, and I understand he must use the darkness in order to accomplish his goal, but that too, on both sides of the equation is absolutely heart-rending.   He cannot afford to give in to any softer emotions at this point.

Yet even in shoring up his darkness, I see and hear Elrohir fighting not to reach out to Legolas,  consciously refusing to allow himself to alleviate the desparate need for consolation, for some comfort in this lonely task appointed only to the woodelf.  It sings through the whole chapter, inspite of the prevailing darkness. 

Bring on the Nazgul!  I'm dying to read that challenge!

Tanis

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curiouswombat - 19 Nov 10 - 1:49 PM

Ch. 22: Obsession

Gulp...

I'm not sure who to weep for most.

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Azalais - 09 Dec 10 - 6:30 AM

Ch. 22: Obsession

Woah, Elrohir the anti-hero! I'm so hoping you're going to bring him back from here, because you're really turning him to the Dark Side just now...

Your descriptive powers do come out again in this chapter, with the wild loneliness of the place and the cold.

I have a horrible feeling I'm not going to like the next chapter, though...

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AndreaH - 10 Sep 11 - 2:29 PM

Ch. 22: Obsession

Glad to hear so clearly that Elrohir has his own plan, because Gandalf's has this extra fatal flaw; how is Elrohir to escape? Of course, does he want to?

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Erulisse - 06 Dec 10 - 7:18 AM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

Holy buckets of rain, Batman!  What a way to run a chapter and to leave us.  Have I told you lately that you are cruel?  But I still eat it up - every word, every consonant, every vowel.  I wouldn't change a thing, and I live for the future - more chapters, more, more, more.  It's SO good. 

- Erulisse (one L)

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eliza61 - 06 Dec 10 - 9:01 AM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

Breathe in, breathe out, breathe in, breathe out.  3 Nazgul, you sicced 3 nazguls on poor Legolas!!   Ok, let's get the usual out the way.  well written as usual.  Really enjoyed the emotional upheaval Legolas is going through  talk about a depressed and confused elf!!

"spring was on its way.. and he would not be here to see it".  How utterly sad.

Now,  where in the sam hill is Elrohir?  boy is he ticking me off. I loved legolas's defiance at the end,now that's the warrior I Know and love.

Well done and definitely worth the wait. 

Did I tell you I was one of those annoying "happy ever after" type of gals? 

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curiouswombat - 06 Dec 10 - 2:14 PM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

Oh my goodness  - Elrohir - where are you?  Will you do as you are meant to?  In which case; oh my goodness Ziggy you've....no I won't say, in case anyone sees the comment before the chapter!

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elftart - 07 Dec 10 - 2:55 AM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

OMG how could you leave us like that...what a chapter ,i don't think i was breathing at all. cannot wait to see if Legolas survives , it will be a one sided love affair otherwise.

please update soon...

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Azalais - 09 Dec 10 - 6:33 AM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

I got here!

YOU CAN'T KILL MY ELF!

But I have a horrible feeling you just did... Ai, my hero, what have you done to him? And what on Middle-earth are you going to do to Elrohir?

And now I know how the readers of my now-finally-finished Epic Fic used to feel when they got caught up and had to wait for the next chapter! Off to sign up for an alert...

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ziggy - 09 Dec 10 - 2:14 PM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

Azalais- it has been such fun reading your comments as you move through the chapters to culminate in your last declaration!! Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. Hm..yes, as you say- where IS Elrohir and what is he doing when he should be carrying out HIS task. Well- you have to re-read the previous two chapters for a clue and I am getting stuck into the next one, but it will be  a little while as RL just does creep up on you!! Hope you noticed the dedication  : )

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ziggy - 09 Dec 10 - 2:14 PM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

Azalais- it has been such fun reading your comments as you move through the chapters to culminate in your last declaration!! Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. Hm..yes, as you say- where IS Elrohir and what is he doing when he should be carrying out HIS task. Well- you have to re-read the previous two chapters for a clue and I am getting stuck into the next one, but it will be  a little while as RL just does creep up on you!! Hope you noticed the dedication  : )

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Tanis - 09 Dec 10 - 4:13 PM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

What?! I'm missing an archive?  I only know about two, ff.net and here; what's the third one?  I don't want to be missing out on anything now!

This chapter is so bright with the spark that is your interpretation of Legolas - vunerable, yet at the same time, a tower of strength and composure; an unquenchable flame buffeted by the winds of war, but even in doubt, sure and certain in his course of action; with such a bright essence, I hold to my course that there is no way it could be extinguished by some formless shadow of a Nazgul!

But omg, you're breaking my heart into itty bitty pieces every time I open a new chapter and submerge into this fantastic universe again.  I'm not even bothering to try and piece it back together in between postings anymore, I know its just gonna be shattered again, so I'm waiting 'til the end to glue it back together. 

I know I can't do anything about the new job ::grrrr:: (I don't suppose the old one is still availabe and you could back to it? Tongue out) but is there any kind of bribery your muse responds to? 

Tanis

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Azalais - 10 Dec 10 - 2:47 PM

Ch. 23: Ulairi

Hm..yes, as you say- where IS Elrohir and what is he doing when he should be carrying out HIS task. Well- you have to re-read the previous two chapters for a clue...

I have a suspicion that rather than, as it appears on the surface, callously betraying Legolas to his fate, Elrohir is playing a double game of some kind. However, if - as I fervently hope - it's not Legolas he's betraying, then he must be intending to double-cross Sauron. Which is a very, very dangerous game, and I hope to goodness he knows what he's doing...

And I also selfishly hope that, Christmas or no Christmas, the Muse will be kind and RL cooperative simultaneously, and let you write!

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Erulisse - 08 Jan 11 - 5:40 PM

Ch. 24: Chapter 24: Nine for Mortal Men

Oh Ziggy (and Anarithilen), this was well worth waiting for.  Wheels within wheels within wheels.  And which will prevail?  It is impossible to say for sure because all good has evil and all evil can have some good (with the possible exception of Melkor). This was an amazing chapter. 

- Erulisse (one L)

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curiouswombat - 09 Jan 11 - 7:50 AM

Ch. 24: Chapter 24: Nine for Mortal Men

I have held to myself the knowledge that this chapter was here as I did all the necessary church and household things - and then sat and devoured it! 

Oh Elrohir, what have you done?  Who have you  successfully deceived whether by intent, and not?  And Gandalf?  What wisdom was this?  Is it as you planned?

Oh what a tangled web you weave... 

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curiouswombat - 09 Jan 11 - 7:53 AM

Ch. 24: Chapter 24: Nine for Mortal Men

Oh - goes back and reconsiders the idea of 'Nine for Mortal Men' when offering one to someone who is 3/4 Elven...

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Azalais - 11 Jan 11 - 2:45 PM

Ch. 24: Chapter 24: Nine for Mortal Men

I knew it! I hoped Elrohir was planning to double-cross Sauron, but I also had a horrible feeling he'd bitten off more than he could chew...

I like the idea of the Nazgul thinking in Adunaic, makes perfect sense; also serves to bring out how scarily other they are.

And very very vivid descriptions, as ever, of the Ringwraiths and of Elrohir's rage and Legolas as a shining pure light. I hadn't considered before this fic quite how powerful against the Nazgul (and what a lure for them) the Twins might be as the descendants of Luthien - perhaps because LoTR focuses so much more on Aragorn in that respect - but it's entirely plausible.

(And please can I have Legolas back? whimpers pathetically...)

Glad to hear next chapter fairly imminent! Yay!

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Tanis - 21 Jan 11 - 6:33 PM

Ch. 24: Chapter 24: Nine for Mortal Men

After I managed to read ALL of the next chapter, I had to come back and reread this again, slowly and sitting down the whole time, not running the room screaming like a banshee at m'lord Elf who allowed the shining elf to be damaged unto death.  I was ready to kill Elrohir the first time I read this chapter and could not sit down long enough to even write coherent feedback here. 

Bloody hell, Ziggy!  Three weeks later, I still want to murder Elrohir slowly, make him suffer greatly for letting his pride and arrogance cause Legolas such torture.  But, I suspect, if he'd done it Gandalf's way, Legolas would be seriously dead by now, with an arrow through his head or heart.  And so, having read the next chapter, I can forgive Elrohir - a little bit.  I would just kill him more quickly now, though it would still have to inolve some torture - perhaps vivid visions of Legolas fulfilled and madly in love with Elladan.  No, not satisfying enough; there must be blood as well.  Yorick

That said, as for the incredible writing in this chapter -- the intensity of the storm as the harbinger of the Nazgul, but even more as a mirror for the insanity both Legolas and Elrohir's are experiencing is glorious.  Elrohir's recognition of his own stupidity (thank you for that!) though it only lasts a few seconds and the way it feeds his fury, which in turns feeds his ability to give the Nazgul exactly what he intended to in the first place is - the picture of the ring in Minas Tirith, is both realistically drawn in your word pictures and delivered with the queasy, knife-edge of  truth.  Would he have had the strength to hide the reality of the ring's journey if he hadn't been so furious?  If he hadn't just watched his might-have-been-savior die a horrible death?  If Legolas' frightened and lost-looking (sniff sniff) ghost hadn't been hovering over Khamul's shoulder, would he have been able to deliver the death blow to Sauron's hopes?

But I jump ahead -- I was also much impressed with the echoes of THE ring of power in the ring the Nazgul create around Legolas with sorcery - an incredibly powerfully written scene, even if I had to force myself to read slowly and with care as I was forcing myself to breathe deeply, not just skip over it because they were hideously torturing the gorgeous one.

And then the unmitigated gall of the new head Dark Guy in extending an invitation to join them.  The python dressed up in a feather boa wearing a velvet glove.  Oh yeah, I can't wait to see how that turns out.  Maybe they can squeeze a bit of the darkness out of Elrohir. 

Sound the trumpets - the hunt is on!  And finally, I'm tottering on over to review Chapter 25 on rubbery legs after reading this chapter again, but they're holding me up now, finally, since I at least have an idea what's coming.

Great chapter, Ziggy!

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Erulisse - 21 Jan 11 - 6:19 PM

Ch. 25: Vigil

Jeez, Ziggy.  Just when I thought this couldn't possibly get any better, it does.  Now bringing the others into the mix, and leaving it where you did...  And Elrohir's admission of guilt to Elladan...  I always look forward to the next chapter, and I'm always disappointed when I am finished reading it (although I will read it again and again), but you never fail to deliver something that keeps me seated on the edge of my chair. 

- Erulisse (one L)

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Tanis - 21 Jan 11 - 7:29 PM

Ch. 25: Vigil

Damn!  As I've been thinking about this story and what might be coming, I was wondering if you were going to throw us back to Minas Tirith for an easy, quick chapter and a little breathing room.  I was gonna be so wicked if you did that to us!  And what happens, the chapter opens with GImli and Elladan on the walls of the city!

::howls:: what a showman you are!  You could give lessons to P.T. Barnum!  (maybe he isn't famous across the pond, but on the US side, he's a famous entertainer - well known for his showmanship).   Almost - I threw up my hands and went to egg houses to burn off my wrath, but I perserved and found, to my great relief, the entire chapter was not about the folks left behind! 

AND my tarnished hope is brightening considerably after this chapter.  I printed it out before reading it this time, but it was no different, I still had to put it down and pace around the kitchen often before picking it up to read again. 

So the things I loved about this chapter ... the descriptions of Elrohir handling the threads of Legolas' soul - incomparable.  The etheral tenderness woven into the words describing Legolas in his vulnerable state, terribly frightened by the ending he's obviously sensing, yet unwilling - still - to have Elrohir use the ring.  Gimli's grief - served up with perfect side of righteous indignation.  Gandalf's tenderness, now the elf is dead (damn him too!), but still heart-wrenching.  Elrohir's brokeness (he deserves to be a sorry, broken elf- he's still not forgiven) as he gives Legolas to Gandalf, and then with Elladan.  And the putting on of the ring ... oh golly ... where oh where will that lead?  Will Elrohir be able to fight the power of it, when he meets the Nazgul again, which appears to be immienent.  Will he be able to turn its power to his own use? 

Not that I care - the Nazgul can nibble him to death from toes to fingers so long as Gandalf and Gimli get Legolas away.  But then what if the Maia does not have the power to return the fear (no little umlats or punctuation marks on my computer, I have to copy and paste them all - sorry) to the body on his own????  What if he needs Elrohir to sing to Legolas to seal the seams and make him whole again? 

Oh god, flay me with that feather boa the snakey Nazgul adorned himself with in the last review.  I'm dying an exquisite inch-by-tortourous inch death as you play with my mind, Ziggy!

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elftart - 22 Jan 11 - 4:04 AM

Ch. 25: Vigil

OMG How could you leave us hanging like that !!!!!

i will hold my breath till the next chapter so please may it be ASAP.This is a great story , even if we are all very stressed out here. Please hurry..

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Azalais - 22 Jan 11 - 1:46 PM

Ch. 25: Vigil

Wonderful tension on the walls of the City as they watch the mountains; I did heartlessly enjoy Gandalf's horror as he realised how far things had departed from his oh-so-clever plan! Serve him right!

And Gimli, again, just right - his steadfastness, his very private rituals (so Dwarven), his fury and grief. Stroke of genius to have his presence be the thing that makes it possible for Legolas's rapidy-fading spirit to follow his body down the mountain.

And now the Peredhil get to take their fury out on the Nazgul, and vice versa - that should be a battle and a half! Waiting impatiently...

(Also finding myself speculating ahead about whether, if Legolas *is* saved, he's going to be fit enough to ride out to the Black Gate - seems most unlikely on the face of it; or, come to think of it, will the entire assault  by the Captains of the West prove unnecessary in this AU since Sauron is presumably quite distracted enough already? But I'm getting way too far ahead!)

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curiouswombat - 25 Jan 11 - 1:49 PM

Ch. 25: Vigil

I have put off reading this chapter because I knew how strong, and how painful, it was likely to be and I have been writing a Rumil/Tindómë sex scene - it was never going to mix!

And what a powerful chapter. Gimli is perfect - I love the idea of a dwarven rosary.  And what an excellent portrayal of Gandalf, there on the city walls, when he realises the plan may not, really, have been his at all.  Although I wanted to yell 'serves you bloody well right!' and possibly hit him with something like a heavy dwarven boot.

And Legolas - I want to take his frightened, lost, fëa and hug him.  I even want to hug Elrohir - and then hit him - hard!

All this emotion -  I was right to wait until I'd finished the gently kinky het sex!

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AndreaH - 10 Sep 11 - 3:39 PM

Ch. 25: Vigil

Not at all the twist I thought of 2 chapters back when I wondered about Elrohir's plan. Lovely twisting and turning, I'll have to go back and read again (but it's midnight, so not today).

Gimli telling a rosary, what a beautiful, unexpected image. And of course, why hadn't I ever wondered what happened to Angmar's ring? Can Gandalf put Legolas back together without Elrohir fast enough? Why doesn't Gandalf realize that Elrohir is wearing the ring, he should sense it immediately! Or is he?

And how is Elladan going to cope with his brother's confession...

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Erulisse - 24 Feb 11 - 6:14 PM

Ch. 26: Chapter 26:Khamul

Wow.  Just wow.  Nothing else need be said...

- Erulisse (one L)

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curiouswombat - 25 Feb 11 - 4:35 AM

Ch. 26: Chapter 26:Khamul

Oh wow!  That is true 'horror' writing - the sense of atmosphere, confusion, menace, all so well done.

Now, perhaps, they might begin to understand how much has been their own selves, how much something horribly 'other'.

And then rescue Legolas - of course...

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eliza61 - 25 Feb 11 - 1:33 PM

Ch. 26: Chapter 26:Khamul

Oh what a lovely sad, scary chapter Ziggy!  very emotional and well written.  Poor Elladan.  Boy, I'm really hoping there is a happy ending soon. 

Why do the Nazgul hate Thranduil more than others?

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Azalais - 25 Feb 11 - 3:43 PM

Ch. 26: Chapter 26:Khamul

"By the pricking of my thumbs, Something wicked this way comes..."

Brrr. The oily corruption of the mist; the stench; the foes that are there-and-not-there. It is, as others have said, a real horror piece - the fog used like something out of Conan Doyle to play on our imaginations and the twins'.

And thank goodness Elladan recognised the Ring he carried, and its power, just before its temptation overcame him altogether.

Now - where in Middle-earth has Gandalf got to?

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Tanis - 27 Feb 11 - 2:43 PM

Ch. 26: Chapter 26:Khamul

Now there was a totally unexpected twist - for Elladan to find the dropped ring and almost put it on ... whoa!  An excellent redirection of the reader , since I was certain that ring was in Elrohir's pocket and Elladan was just *feeling* it there, and it's call, through his twin.  Well done!

Strangely, though I was hot for Elrohir's blood after his scheming to save the elf in his own way did not pan out, watching that shaming play out in front of my eyes was extremely, 'stremely painful.  Which only speaks again, to what a talented artist you are, Ziggy.  You've a fine hand with the horror part of this story, in addition to the erotic.  Grin

All my desire for revenge has shifted itself to Khamul.  If he has burnt to a crisp that tender green light that is the elf, may he live to die a thousand more horrible deaths!

Here's hoping Legolas's POV in the next chapter is less ... (trying to think of the right words) resistent to presenting itself?  And the writing flows quickly and smoothly with purpose and intent!  I'm soooo looking forward to the next chapter!

Heart Tanis

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Erulisse - 04 Mar 11 - 7:17 PM

Ch. 27: Fireflies

I've always loved fireflies, and now I know why.  Each chapter is better than the one before, and each one keeps me wishing for the next one. 

- Erulisse (one L)

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Azalais - 05 Mar 11 - 12:15 AM

Ch. 27: Fireflies

Yesssss!  (Sighs with relief.)

Gandalf is so wonderfully IC here - filled with power, yet irascible and short-tempered. I love his terse explanations to the Twins as to why they shouldn't even contemplate using the Ring; and I also like the fact that (as in Moria) Gandalf is tired after deploying serious enchantment.

The description of Gimli's confused thoughts and experience of pain as he's waking up is very effective too.

I'm wondering one or two things about the Ring of Power though - such as whether, having carried it, Elrohir wouldn't have realised sooner that he'd dropped it, or that Elladan had picked it up. And whether Gandalf wouldn't have sensed that each of them had had it. And I'm just slightly confused - at the end of the chapter, has Elladan picked it up again or is the lineThe cold iron ring pressed against his chest and pulsed lightly. He could take it. He could have more power than he dreamed... He could... a flashback to the previous chapter? I'm hoping the latter!

And the fireflies - lovely device. Could have been corny but I think the fact you put them in from Gimli's POV, and his natural scepticism - the wizard's cracked, but let's humour him, it's often a good idea - saves us from that.

Fab fab fab! More please!

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Imber - 10 Mar 11 - 3:44 AM

Ch. 27: Fireflies

This is lovely - the fireflies, Gandalf's exasperation, the twins' conflict and Gimli. And it's getting more hopeful.

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Aiwendiel - 21 Mar 11 - 4:26 PM

Ch. 27: Fireflies

Okay -- just found this confoundededly lovely, hot, thrilling, terrifying and addicting story, and read it pretty much straight through, and damn, I am hooked -- just what I needed, when my own AU tale is not done either!! What powerful imagery, story, characterizations! Add my clamor to the rest: more! MORE!

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AndreaH - 11 Sep 11 - 1:54 PM

Ch. 27: Fireflies

I was very relieved to read Elladan decided to leave the ring behind; hopefully the Nazgul will be content with recovering them both and Gandalf and co can get away?

"A lightness returned to his spirit that he had not realised he had lost" reminds me a little of Frodo on Mt Doom, before and after the ring has been destroyed. Obviously these rings corrupt very strongly. How will the brothers' relationship play out?

And there were 4 Nazgul in all? Missed that.

Thanks very much

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eliza61 - 02 Apr 11 - 1:55 PM

Ch. 28: The Houses of Healing

so intense Ziggy, yet very poignant.   So Elrohir has finally come to grips with his actions, interesting.  All the characters, from Aragorn to Pippin seem absolutely "tired" as if for the first time they all realize how much the quest will/is costing them.

Well written as usual!

Eliza

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curiouswombat - 02 Apr 11 - 3:45 PM

Ch. 28: The Houses of Healing

Another powerful chapter - as intense as ever - and yet with the possibility of hope.  The way in which all the characters are now almost at the end of their tethers is so believable - and gut-wrenchingly well portrayed.  I still want to give all of them a cuddle - possibly even Gandalf by now - although I'm still not too sure about that...

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Tanis - 16 May 11 - 3:37 PM

Ch. 28: The Houses of Healing

You have sucked out the very marrow of my bones with this chapter, Ziggy.  Left me sagging weakly on my sofa, wrung out with the depth of emotion drawn from me by the images conjured with your words.

From Aragorn's recounting of his first meeting with Legolas to the last "I am Legolas Thanduillion..."  I was riveted - and this the third reading of this chapter. 

The change up to Pippin's POV was perfectly tuned after the last chapter.  I loved his staunch support of Aragorn's lonely watch, the wringing sorrow so movingly portrayed as he gradually comes to understand Legolas' condition, his longing for the familiarity of home, his mundane normality in such equisite counterpoint to the madness Legolas has been plunged into.  Just awesome. 

But it was reading the scene that Pippin describes as he hears Legolas scream and scream and scream while everyone argues around them from inside Legolas mind that shredded me.  I said with the last chapter you do horror well, but this was horror on steroids.  You put me right in there, trapped with Legolas in that repetitvely endless cycle of burning pain, both physical and psychological.  You are extremely gifted with the ability to paint these word pictures so vividly that your reader experiences it right along with the character.  I'm probably repeating myself, but I think it every time I read one of these chapters - heck, I feel it every time read one of these chapters. 

And then Elrohir's plea to Aragorn not to drug the elf again ... such brokeness, such humility, I can feel the sorrow seeping off him like sweat.  And while I personally think he deserves to sweat sorrow, the portrayal of abject misery, of purpose to right the wrong he has done, of the love he has finally come to terms with is like all the chords of the Grand Symphony of the Song coming together at last. 

Mmmmmmmmmmmm .... supremely satisfying.  Now hurry up and write some more! 

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curiouswombat - 20 Apr 11 - 12:42 AM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

Sorry- updates are going to be a bit slow but I will try to get things out as quickly as possible.

Ziggy, dear, write at whatever speed works for you right now - and we will be here waiting.

This is another beautifully written chapter which was well worth the waiting for; the sense of desperation, yet also a calmness as of a storm receding, highlighted and lightened by Pippin. 

And oh how I feel for Legolas, memories jumbled and only half there, trying to make sense of his surroundings - and being - um - ably - abetted by Pippin.

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eliza61 - 20 Apr 11 - 4:42 AM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

Oh how very sad and haunting.  Why is it human (and apparently elf also) nature that we only realize the important things in life when we are so close to losing them?   At the begininng of this story I wasn't sure if I would ever forgive Elrohir, I can  understand now his fear of losing both his brother and Legolas.

Write when you can Ziggy, I'll be here.

Well done.

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Erulisse - 20 Apr 11 - 10:03 AM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

Oh Ziggy, so sad.  Legolas' inability to heal and remember, Elrohir's admitting his wrongs and his love, and the remainder of the Fellowship readying themselves for what seems like certain death within a seven-night.  Once again you have broken a path that I run down with abandon, and once again I can only say "Thank You". 

- Erulisse (one L)

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Azalais - 21 Apr 11 - 3:41 AM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

So much to relish in this chapter!

a battle they did not hope to win, for that was not why they were going...

That aspect of the Captains of the West's ride to the Black Gate always breaks my heart, as you know.

I love the description of Legolas turning his own Song to the healing of his body; that Elven interweaving of spirit and body feels just right.  And throughout the chapter, even though Legolas doesn't remember who he is yet, his Wood-elven nature and its contrast both with the stone city of Men and with the Peredhil/Noldor comes through beautifully. This is just perfect:

the notes of green leaves, of clear forest streams running over mossy, granite rocks, tumbling into shady pools where ferns grew and sunlight dappled...

That's my beloved Legolas, all right.

just like Thranduil if Legolas forgot his manners — that imperious, quizzical stare that needed no word and every one of his grown sons would drop their gaze and shuffle.

Hoh, yes! Grin  And Pippin and Gandalf are both so in-character. in case, just for a change, you speak without thinking first!'

Am so glad that Elrohir has defeated his temptations, even though the place he's left in as a result is so sad.

This is such a tough, sad point in the story both in the canon and here - powerfully rendered but I am so hoping for happiness in the end! More please!

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Lindariel - 21 Apr 11 - 4:30 PM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

Ziggy -- I am thoroughly, thoroughly, thoroughly enjoying this wonderful tale.  Of course, I want more -- immediately! -- but you must absolutely continue at your own pace.  Just know that you have many patient admirers hanging on your every word -- and I am one of them!  Best regards, Lindariel

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Azalais - 22 Apr 11 - 2:47 AM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

I should have added that saying "More please!" was in no way intended to put pressure on you - I'm not sure if I did review the previous chapter [my bad] but if it didn't it was purely due to it happening to fall during Back to Middle-earth Month when I was insanely trying to write a drabble every day!

Believe me, if anyone knows about how long it can take to get an Epic Fic done it's me - Powers took me seven years and sometimes (pesky things like babies getting in the way) I didn't update for a year - and my faithful readers still came back! I know how frustrating it is when the desire to write and the opportunity to write don't match up - please don't feel pressured by your readership. We love the story and we won't be going anywhere - all good things come to those who wait!

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Tanis - 16 May 11 - 4:27 PM

Ch. 29: Fellowship

Ahhhhhhh .... sigh sigh sigh.  From horror to healing, thank all the Valar!  The elf is awake and with enough memory to imply that he will be returned to himself by the end of the story.  I'm very curious to see how that will unfold and to what ends Elrohir will be taken on the remainder of this journey.

These last two chapters in particular made me wonder if your RL involves some sort of practice in the healing arts.  How insightful of Elrohir (and his author Grin) to allow Legolas to find his own way back without trying to hurry or otherwise speed up the process.  And I so appreciated being able to *watch* Elrohir watch Legolas waken.  It was like watching a fabled love story unfold as you described both Elrohir's emotions and his expressions in the last chapter and here, in the beautiful descriptions of his need to keep the wood elf safe. 

Legolas' desire for Rávëyon's presence set against that bit of tension that frizzles his spine at the mere thought of the Perhedel -- so realistic given what he's just experienced and what he can't remember, and soooooo exquisitely pleasurable for the reader. 

And then you made me laugh as Pippin starts his monologue on how he's single-handedly saved Middle-earth.  But wait!  Then along comes the rest of the gang and Aragorn bets Gimli that the dwarf will spill all to the elf before they can ride out!  With just a flick of your fingers on the keyboard, you turned the sorrow, without in any way dismissing or diminishing it, into laughter and that was equisitely done as well.

Oh Ziggy, every time I finish a chapter, I try to imagine where it will go from here - and this time I have no clue.  I'm looking forward immensely to seeing what happens next. 

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Erulisse - 28 May 11 - 2:57 AM

Ch. 30: Old Friends

So wonderful to see another chapter in this, Ziggy.  I'm delighted that Legolas is at least well enough to think he can accompany the army to the Black Gate.  He'll have a chance to continue his recovery on the road, and having his friends around him will also help. 

I know how it can be - writing many drafts and finally coming across with one that actually works.  It is far from easy, but you managed well with this chapter.  And, of course, I will happily await the next one Wave

- Erulisse (one L)

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Ithilatta - 28 May 11 - 8:30 AM

Ch. 30: Old Friends

Yea! First Pippin and now Gimli as well... I wonder what kind of hell thy'll have to endure, once Legolas remembers what realy happend -- smirk--

Thanks for the new chapter -- good luck for RL -- and a continuing good muse.

Ithilatta

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curiouswombat - 28 May 11 - 11:06 AM

Ch. 30: Old Friends

I am always happy to see a new chapter.  I really like your portrayal of Legolas here - knowing some things, trying to make sense of others, catching at memories that are just out of reach, not knowing quite what is real and what is not...

The portrayals of both Gimli and Aragorn, when confronted with/by Legolas, are very good too.

Well worth the attempts and re-writes, I would say.  

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Aiwendiel - 06 Jun 11 - 5:53 PM

Ch. 30: Old Friends

Ah, finally caught up with the latest excellent chapter. Wonderful characterizations, spot-on, and devilishly dashing, flirts with anything that breathes Legolas ... He's BAACKK! Thanks! A

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Azalais - 08 Jun 11 - 5:10 AM

Ch. 30: Old Friends

So tantalisingly nearly our Legolas back, and yet not quite, or only in flashes. I love the moment when he teases Gimli about his, and Pippin's, exaggerations of their feats. And the description of Legolas listening to the song of the Mountain, a single deep note, like a heavy bronze bell … the stroke of a drop of water across a mirror of water, is lovely.

I can feel Legolas' frustration at being only half himself - I want him all back too!

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PandaBandit69 - 10 Jun 11 - 6:17 PM

Ch. 31: Confession

Nice! nNew chapters always leave me with a warm and happy feeling.

as always ziggy, your work is phenomenal. honestly, i wish i wrote half as well as you do.

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Aiwendiel - 11 Jun 11 - 6:29 AM

Ch. 31: Confession

Oh, ziggy, this newest chapter is voluptuous! Your language alone is incredibly rich, not to mention the imagery, the intricate characterizations, the plot, the angst... oh, the angst! Truly love the all-so-real complexities you paint for the characters of Gandalf, Elladan, Elrohir, even Celebrian from a distance... every one of them, creatures of "a different fire" in their own way. Oh, yes, and it was nice to have my suspicion confirmed about the source of that blue-silver wall that keeps stopping Legolas from remembering too much too soon... nice touch. Fabulous work!

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Azalais - 11 Jun 11 - 11:45 AM

Ch. 31: Confession

Wow, you are really ramping up the emotional load! - with such vivid, dramatic writing, it wrings the reader's heart. I so like the description of Gandalf, weary in his flesh, conscious both that he is more than mortal, and that he is "just Gandalf, an old man who was tired in his bones." The moment when he, like Legolas, is caught by the scent of the sea and wants to go home is really moving. We so rarely see Gandalf vulnerable, and yet he must have felt so much strain at this stage of the story (even in canon!)

As ever, your descriptions of the Music and the different threads of the Song are lyrical and lovely. I do like the idea of Radagast being able easily to read and gently to manipulate the Song, versus Gandalf the wizard of words.

Oh, and poor, poor Elladan and Elrohir. Both of them. If you do manage to bring them both positively out of this fic, I will take my hat off to you, because they're a long, long way from happy-endings just now...

Wonderful stuff.

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curiouswombat - 02 Jul 11 - 10:10 AM

Ch. 32: A Memory of Rohan

Ah!  Ziggy - another roller-coaster chapter. 

I love the way that, despite how much he cannot remember, Legolas  seems to have not forgotten one word of the tall tales told him by Pippin.  Such a contrast with the tension between the twins, the fears of Aragorn, Éomer's emotions, and Legolas own sense of loss, being lost, and pain.

Bravo!

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eliza61 - 26 Jul 11 - 4:48 AM

Ch. 33: Chapter 33: Osgiliath

Glad to read another chapter Ziggy.  Really enjoyed the interaction between Gimili, Legolas and Pippin.  It will be a very interesting meeting between Legolas and Elrohir indeed. 

Can't wait.  Eliza

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Tanis - 26 Jul 11 - 6:40 AM

Ch. 33: Chapter 33: Osgiliath

Oh be still my heart!  A slightly vulnerable Legolas is just my cup of tea and you manage it so beautifully - so that he is neither wimpy nor whiney in his vulnerability.  Mmmmm goood. 

Gimli's mother-henning is also exquisitely crafted, wonderfully realistic and in character for me.  As is your Pippin - so bright and cheerful no matter what adversity threatens.  I adore him!

And again, your use of song is so intrinsic to this entire chapter, of the broken stones of Osgiliath, the song of the Dunedain and the man of Gondor - your descriptions give me goose bumps of pleasure they are so awesome. 

But back to Legolas - this form of torture you've created with Gandalf's silver blue veil in the elf's mind is a thing of shimmering beauty in and of itself.  And I love that you have Legolas feeling his way toward wholeness again, but heeding the warnings of his heart not to tamper with that veil just yet.  Beautifully done! 

Really must get to work now, but what a lovely, lovely way to start my morning. 

Thanks, Ziggy!  And I am holding my breath Wink waiting for the next chapter since you said it wouldnt be long.

Tanis

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curiouswombat - 26 Jul 11 - 11:52 AM

Ch. 33: Chapter 33: Osgiliath

So good to have this time focussed on the friendship between the three here and that interlude between Gimli and the stonemasons is a joy.

How right, I feel, Gimli is to tell Legolas some of the 'back-story' - I am sure it is very much the right thing, even if it brought back memories of which Gimli knew nothing.

I like, too, Legolas examining that shimmering silver veil and realising that it might be best for it to not be rent in two just yet.

I am certainly looking forward to seeing where the next chapter will take them all.

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Cuinwen - 26 Jul 11 - 8:30 PM

Ch. 33: Chapter 33: Osgiliath

This chapter is a nice study of how the world might seem to an elf.  The collision of elf-dwarf-hobbit is interesting, and at first I thought you'd missed a golden opportunity for an inter-species cultural set piece, but that would have detracted from Legolas's all too natural self-absorbtion.

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Azalais - 28 Jul 11 - 12:49 AM

Ch. 33: Chapter 33: Osgiliath

Your descriptions in this chapter are, as ever, so rich - fallen Osgiliath like a mouth full of broken teeth; Gimli with the stonemasons (wonderful!), Legolas' vivid memories of Elrohir at Pelargir, a tall figure, long black hair whipped by the wind, sable cloak pulled, flattened around him by the same wind, turning on him, nobility turned to savagery, the fire and antipathy of someone he admired and then hard, splitting blows upon his cheek, head, chest...

And yet again powerful, lyrical descriptions of the Song of each being as Legolas hears it. I love the last line!

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Ithilatta - 27 Jul 11 - 3:27 AM

Ch. 34: Yôzâira

Ai... Legolas!...

Wow. I enjoyed this new dubblepack of chapters. 

This kind of cliffy leaves me feeling giddy, waiting for the next chapter.

Poor Legolas. What has he to go through now?

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curiouswombat - 27 Jul 11 - 1:45 PM

Ch. 34: Yôzâira

What well drawn contrasts you write, Ziggy.

Firstly that between the previous chapter and this one, and then between the almost light-heartedness of Legolas here and the great weight of guilt, horror, fear - and external pressure - with which Elrohir is burdened.

Well written, indeed.

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Azalais - 28 Jul 11 - 1:04 AM

Ch. 34: Yôzâira

Yet again so vivid and so immediate. One of the things I have enjoyed all through this fic is your sense of the very different perspectives of Elves and Men, and you bring it out again here - pointing out that Elrohir would probably have seen Minas Ithil in its glory days before Ithilien's fall. Ai.

So much anticipation in the previous chapter of this encounter between Elrohir and Legolas - and then it all goes horribly wrong, again. (I am just getting impatient - I remember those wonderful, warm, erotic moments shipboard, or in the tent on the Pelennor, and I so much want that resolution for them both... and then you keep whisking it away! My only concern from a story point of view is - don't let the two of them get stuck at this stage of things for too long, will you? Something has to happen to break this deadlock!

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eliza61 - 28 Jul 11 - 5:22 PM

Ch. 34: Yôzâira

Ai, how sad Ziggy.  some how I doubt very much if this is how legolas thought his meeting with Elrohir would go.I definitely thought it would go a bit better.   It also heartbreakingly sad about Elrohir, I just don't see how he is going to defeat all his demons.   You have written his turmoil so very well.

Thanks  

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AndreaH - 16 Sep 11 - 2:37 PM

Ch. 34: Yôzâira

Why did no-one think to tell Legolas to stay away from heights? How stupid to tryst on a ruined tower in the middle of a war zone with Nazgul on the prowl!

Wonderful job, the back-and-forth in Elrohir's emotions as he is manipulated. Poor Legolas, this isn't his night, although he'll understand better now as I imagine his memory will come back, if he hasn't been carried away by the Nazgul. Surely that flying thing was too injured to pick up an elf...

At least Elrohir didn't think of his mother. And if the Nazgul want 9, who else are they going to co-opt...

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Aiwendiel - 11 Aug 11 - 3:16 PM

Ch. 35: Penance

'Forgive me, Elrohir. Forgive me,' he found himself saying.

Quite possibly the most moving and astonishing words in this truly amazing, rich and remarkable fic. 9 deceptively simple words that sum it all up. 

Another fabulously thrilling chapter, zig! My head is swirling with images of the ruins of Osgiliath and green, crimson and blue energies all molten together! Thanks and I look forward to however many more your muse can give you. Aiwendiel

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Aiwendiel - 11 Aug 11 - 3:33 PM

Ch. 35: Penance

Oh yeah, almost forgot -- LOVE that Pippin is the one to take notice of the goings-on and his internal comments -- delicious, esp the moment of "Both! Well, there was a surprise!" Delightful slice of humor/relief. A

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Erulisse - 04 Oct 11 - 2:44 AM

Ch. 35: Penance

Ziggy - I finally have a quick moment to myself to catch up a bit.  Read Chp 34 and 35 in the same morning - what a wonderful way to start my day.  My dear, you know how I adore the tale you have been weaving, but these two chapters are truly magnificant.  I hope I find a bit more time in the near future to catch up with #36 and 37.  Hugs to you, my friend! 

- Erulisse (one L)

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curiouswombat - 22 Aug 11 - 10:46 AM

Ch. 36: Forgiveness

What an excellent chapter.  The understanding now between Elladan and Elrohir; the moment of recognition on Aragorn's part; Legolas coming closer and closer to full recall, and coping with it; that satisfyingly serious conversation between him and Elrohir;  all perfect, I think.

And that final scene with Pippin - priceless.

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Azalais - 23 Aug 11 - 5:28 AM

Ch. 36: Forgiveness

I agree with curiouswombat - what a satisfying chapter. Not the end, but perhaps the beginning of a move towards resolution after so many frustrations and misunderstandings.

And I admire your decision not to throw Legolas and Elrohir at each other in fanfic-cliche fashion, but to have them behave like the centuries-old warriors they are, accepting that "now is not the time".

So much vivid description again, of Aicanaro, of the nighttime sounds of the camp - I love the scene with the three Elves around the campfire and Aragorn observing them, so quietly and astutely, such a Ranger. Great stuff.

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Erulisse - 29 Jan 12 - 6:42 PM

Ch. 36: Forgiveness

I am finally giving myself a treat and allowing myself to catch up on the story.  The best part about being behind is that I can read more than one chapter at a time.  The worst thing is that I was so behind!  Shame on me! 

- Erulisse (one L)

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curiouswombat - 01 Oct 11 - 3:29 AM

Ch. 37: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath

Ah - a new chapter - this has certainly made my morning - I couldn't resist and wait until this evening.

I love Pippin's mental letter to Merry - I think you very clever to use his point of view here so that we are as unsure of exactly what all those conversations are about as he is.

As for "In fact, the Hobbits had decided a long time ago that that was the reason for Elrond choosing Legolas and not some great and powerful Elf lord like Glorfindel."  I think Pippin might very well have a good point there.

I loved that interaction between Legolas and Elrohir during the march - and the perfect contrast there at the end of the chapter.

I wonder if Pippin realises that he might be being used as bait?

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Tanis - 01 Oct 11 - 9:17 AM

Ch. 37: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath

Mmmmmmmmmmm ... my Saturday morning is now replete as well.

As I was reading this chapter it occurred to me you even have the gift of making the long, boring march of an army scintallating and fun to read! It also occurred to me that this entire story has been one I have never hurried through, skipping boring stuff or reading quickly over stuff I don't care for. You have engaged my brain and my heart every step of the way on this journey, drawn me in like fish on a line, happy to be hooked!

Pippin's POV is always a joy to read as his author has crafted so a multi-layered halfling here. His longing for home, his keen powers of observation, his desire to cheer up everyone, his need to meddle in everything ... he's the cutest hobbit imaginable. And I loved his imaginary letter to Merry.

Another great chapter, Ziggy. And I've had a wonderful morning because of you! Thanks, hon!

hugs, tanis

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Aiwendiel - 02 Oct 11 - 5:49 PM

Ch. 37: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath

Absolutely brilliant to show this series of scenes through the innocent but knowing eyes of Pippin. So creepy and cunning that he is unaware--or is only slowly becoming aware--that he is the only Hobbit in the group and thus the logical poor sucker who must be hiding "It". The tension is so thick, I feel the hairs on the back of my neck rising, just like Pip's! Agghh, so much angst--everyone is on the edge of a knife. Can't wait to learn just what Gimli and Aragorn were jawing about, and for some long awaited resolution... to all sorts of unresolved issues!! Carry on, please, and hurry! Aiwendiel.

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curiouswombat - 29 Oct 11 - 12:47 PM

Ch. 38: Before the Black Gate

Firstly what a wonderful description of Gimli readying himself for battle - it rings absolutely true.

And Legolas' line about where Gil-Galad went wrong is just wonderful - it shows the depth of his value for Gimli and the hobbits perfectly.

Then Gimli tutting at the wastefulness of those slag-heaps on the approach to the gate - so perfectly him that, even in this sombre place, it made me smile.

But the heart of the chapter is those encounters between Elrohir and Legolas, Elrohir and Elladan, and Elrohir and Éomer - with a side order of Nazgul.  Those encounters form a chapter heart that has my own heart beating a little faster in fear for them all.

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Tanis - 30 Oct 11 - 7:11 AM

Ch. 38: Before the Black Gate

Oh how I've missed these characters and their story!  So glad to find the note in my box last night that a new chapter was up! 

Again you had me laughing and crying from one sentence to the next, and sighing.  Gimli making love to his axe in the beginning (lolololololol), his observations of Pippin's short-sightedness even as Pippin rubbed the dwarf's nose in those observations - hilarious. 

Loved the little clues that Elladan might have found a distraction, at least, from his infatuation with Legolas!  After all he's been through, all he's given up in an effort to save his brother, I was so hoping he would find comfort somewhere.  It made my heart very glad!

It was Elrohir's dilemma again - will he choose - that brought me to tears.  That and Aragorn's difficult birthing as a new king.  It had never occurred to me before that he and Eomer came into their kingships nearly at the same time.  Aragorn's struggle to enter fully into his birthright, to gather the reins of leadership and government into his hands has been an exquisite secondary story running through Legolas and Elrohir's story of redeeption and high romance.  Your portrayal of Aragorn's humble self-possesion against the tension of the need that drives him has been wonderful to behold.  As Legolas and Elrohir have done in this story, Aragorn becomes so much more multi-dimensional than the ranger who becomes Elessar in the original text. 

Lovely!  Thank you for the morning's baptism of tears and laughter!  Waiting with baited breathe for next weekend!!

tanis

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eliza61 - 31 Oct 11 - 9:11 AM

Ch. 38: Before the Black Gate

Welcome back Ziggy, glad to see a new chapter.  Loved, loved, loved it. Very descriptive, from Gimii and his beard to Pippins reaction in front of the black gate, you can almost feel what they are experiencing.   Your portrayal of gimili here is absolutely wonderful, especially his interaction with Pippin. Laugh out loud

humm Elladan and Imrahil?  now that's a twist I didn't see coming. 

Elrohir is still a tough one for me, he has so much guilt, its hard to imagine him living with himself even with the assurance of Legolas's love. 

Can't wait for more.

E

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Aiwendiel - 31 Oct 11 - 10:19 AM

Ch. 38: Before the Black Gate

Aghhhhh shiver me timbers! Another chapter as tense as steel cables twisted tightly. The shifting pov's are wonderful, ditto on all the previous comments on Gimli's wonderfully fey voice, Pippin's young, impish and brave one, Aragorn's reaching for his destiny. And legolas, El and El! I am shivering with delight! Awesome twist at the end... can't wait for the next one!

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AndreaH - 31 Oct 11 - 3:17 PM

Ch. 38: Before the Black Gate

I shan't repeat it all, but pretty much all of the above comments hit a chord with me. Poor Éomer, poor Pippin, maybe poor Legolas?

Hawk, bat, rat... Great word play here! I wonder if Legolas is aware of the Fellowship's speculation about his love life?

Goodness I hope Elrohir is as resistant to the Nazgûl as he thinks he is; this is not the time for overconfidence. And I'm still worried about their plans for the 9th Nazgûl...

Looking forward to the next installment! thanks, AndreaH

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ziggy - 18 Nov 11 - 3:13 PM

Ch. 39: Jaws of Steel

Consumate liars they are indeed, Andrea. Although they are not exactly lying, but as you know, Sauron is the great deceiver and he is twisting the truth to serve his own darker purpose. What is happening elsewhere on the field involves Elrohir of course, and Elrohir is Sauron's goal...the next chapter is with Anar and I hope I can post next week. It will more likely be about four chapter more, depending whether or not it goes the way I have planned it... and you know characters sometimes do the opposite of what you think they'll do!

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Azalais - 17 Feb 12 - 2:34 PM

Ch. 39: Jaws of Steel

I know I'm very very behind on reading (and commenting), but I'm going to try to catch up!

The length of time it takes to build up to the battle here is almost unbearable, the tension so stretched. I particularly like Gimli's intuitive awareness that something is amiss with the stone of the cliffs (the armies of Mordor waiting to pounce, presumably).

And oh, what a terrible note to end on; poor Legolas.

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curiouswombat - 26 Nov 11 - 3:18 AM

Ch. 40: The Mouth of Sauron

Oh wow!  What a powerful chapter.  I could feel it, see it, smell it all.  Again -Wow!

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Aiwendiel - 28 Nov 11 - 8:56 AM

Ch. 40: The Mouth of Sauron

Hmm... several things strike me in this chapter... Having Eomer be the comforting presence at first rather than Gimli (nice touch, continuing to crank up that crackling tension); the thread of Elladan's thoughts of Imrahil... intriguing, though I am trying not to make too much of it (for the moment, til more evidence is forthcoming!!); hints of all sorts of possible outcomes between the Twain and Legolas; and the Mouth himself-- ugh, those teeth! Yechh, one of the most memorable bits of movie-verse, one I had finally managed to forget, thank you for bringing the image back... shudder... And I am so curious about where you are going with Gandalf/Olorin and his relationship to Sauron over the eons... And of course, on top of all of that, just spectacular imagery, angst, Elrohir's beautiful struggle against the Nazgul... alas, poor Kathuphazgân, what a jaw-cracker, as Sam might have said... great work, please more, soon!

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ziggy - 28 Nov 11 - 9:41 AM

Ch. 40: The Mouth of Sauron

Do you know, there IS something isn't there, about Gandalf and Sauron. There has to be a link if you think that Sauron is Gandalf's great work and when he is gone, Gandalf can go home. I just think it needs a little exploring but I haven't got time right now- it might be a short piece...ah, the words are coming now...

I cut the dialogue between Elrohir and the Mouth quite significantly so I hope it was more intense as a result. But that was one of the scenes that was already written in my head and it was just getting there.Grin

Yes- I felt guilty for Kathuphazgân  - he deserved more. 

I am so looking forward to seeing what you are going to do with 'Rope' and Iaurel in particular, with whom I am absolutely besotted!!

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AndreaH - 29 Nov 11 - 1:34 PM

Ch. 40: The Mouth of Sauron

Ah, wonderful once again. Poor Éomer, and how interesting that he helps bring Legolas back.

I've been wondering how Gandalf feels the ring's destruction too. I hadn't really thought of how interconnected Sauron and Gandalf have to be, each aware of the other, since Gandalf got to middle earth?

Great good for thought! Thanks, Andrea

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Azalais - 18 Feb 12 - 12:34 AM

Ch. 40: The Mouth of Sauron

And still you torture your readers!  Legolas is gradually working out just how screwed-up Elrohir is, huh?

Loving the description of Gimli and his song again. And the reminders of just how much family history, both for Legolas and the Sons of Elrond, there is in this place...

And oh, gods, the Mouth of Sauron's lies (I hope!!) about Thranduil and his kingdom. Truly, truly horrible.

One tiny note about the use of "thee/thou" - I think where you have "Thy father will never understand how thee stood and watched!' it should be "how thou didst stand and watch!" (could be "stoodest", but that looks a bit odd to modern eye... but definitely thou rather than thee).

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curiouswombat - 26 Dec 11 - 3:04 AM

Ch. 41: Chapter 41: The Last Battle

Oh my!  What a Christmas gift for us - this long, complex and wonderfully visual chapter.

What a picture of the battle you paint for us - and what a swirl of emotions.  Bravo Ziggy!

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eliza61 - 26 Dec 11 - 10:30 AM

Ch. 41: Chapter 41: The Last Battle

Wow, now that was a rollercoaster ride.  One minute I'm screaming "about time" to Elrohir and the next I'm screaming "they're all going to die".   I also love to read Pippins perspective on the events. 

Well done Ziggy & thanks.

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Aiwendiel - 28 Dec 11 - 2:10 PM

Ch. 41: Chapter 41: The Last Battle

Whoa -- this chapter left me breathless! What a mad, chaotic, thrilling battle scene. Loved so much of it: the intimate scenes with Pippin; Gimli, indominable, Gimli; Legolas the supreme archer of all time; fleeting glimpses of shining Gandalf; Imrahil, Eomer; Aragorn -- wha...! But but...wait a sec...; and of course, OF COURSE you just excel here with Elrohir and the converging wraiths -- I'm getting shivers just commenting on it -- please, will you save them, please? Next chapter immediately, I demand it!

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AndreaH - 28 Dec 11 - 2:27 PM

Ch. 41: Chapter 41: The Last Battle

Argh!! Where are Frodo and Sam, and what are they doing??? Besides increasing the tension mightily? That damn sword, you've been hinting at something like this for chapters. Excellent work!

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ziggy - 01 Jan 12 - 7:26 AM

Ch. 41: Chapter 41: The Last Battle

Oh yes- that cliffhanger, Andrea- sorry about that. Inevitable I'm afraid. But don't worry- the second part of that chapter is just about ready and should be up by next weekend at the latest. You'll understand why it had to be like this when you've read the next bit. And that damned sword, oh yes! It was always going to leave him, wasn't it.

You know I said just one more chapter... well, things just don't always turn out like you think they will...Smile

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Azalais - 18 Feb 12 - 12:46 AM

Ch. 41: Chapter 41: The Last Battle

Reading this chapter really brings home to me how little detail of this battle we get in canon. Presumably JRRT just wanted to push on with his plot... but it's easy in canon to feel as though hardly any time at all elapsed between the beginning of the battle and the coming of the Eagles/fall of Barad-dur. You put all that horror and fear back in terrible detail.

Poor Pippin - I hadn't thought of that implication for him of the suggestion to the Nazgul that Merry had the Ring...

Good to see moments of energetic, able Legolas back, "striding quickly through the ranks of Men to the front line, arrows loosely held in one hand, his bow in the other" - I've really missed that Legolas these last few chapters!

Love the fact that Legolas can withstand the Nazgul's threat -

I tire of you, whelp of Azgarâzir. When this is done, do not think we will neglect you.

but falls apart when he thinks Elrohir is dead.

Oh, oh, and this:

"I will find you,' he said, pulling back and gazing into the green-gold eyes that were full of wonder. 'When this is done, I will find you.'"

gave me a great big lump in my throat.  (Can't wait for them to get there!)

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Aiwendiel - 14 Jan 12 - 8:07 PM

Ch. 42: Aícanaro

Oh. My. God. What wonderful imagery - staggering, tempestuous, like a tsunami of wild energy! Loved (of course) the struggle between the two Maia who have (of course) known one another for all time... And what a scene between the twins -- perfect! PERFECT!

Re; your question at the end -- oh, come on, cut to the chase already! Enough suffering for all their multiple lifetimes put together! 

Thanks for this treat for Saturday night!

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curiouswombat - 15 Jan 12 - 6:40 AM

Ch. 42: Aícanaro

Wow!  What a fantastic, action packed, emotion packed, chapter.  As for your question at the end - hmm - perhaps a bit of the suffering - just to keep it going a little longer and make the happy ending (please, please, there has to be a happy ending, yes?) even more appreciated!

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AndreaH - 15 Jan 12 - 1:12 PM

Ch. 42: Aícanaro

Ooh, Frodo and Sam finally got there. It was lovely, and to me unexpected, how Aícanaro helped at just the right moment... I wondered briefly if someone else might not also finish with one less finger.

Now, can Aragorn help Legolas? Or Olórin, or what about one of the twins? Please, please Smile. As to your question, well I guess either option is fine, more story is good, but cutting to the chase is good too. As long as the chase is good?

thanks, 

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elftart - 15 Jan 12 - 10:28 PM

Ch. 42: Aícanaro

OMG i can't wait for the next chapter...this chapter was sooo stressful. well done. I have to go have a lie down now and wait..

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Azalais - 18 Feb 12 - 6:01 AM

Ch. 42: Aícanaro

Wow - dramatic, dramatic stuff! Really visually arresting descriptions of battle; I thought the imagery of Legolas seeing and seeming to fight in slow motion, due to the effects of the poison, was particularly effective.

Personally, I would say you've spent a good few chapters on the Black Gate, and it would be good to move on. Not necessarily straight to Cormallen - because how they all *got* to Cormallen is a gap in the canon and filling that might be interesting - but beyond the battle, certainly.  And poor old Legolas, I've almost forgotten how it feels to have him hale and well - I love your dynamic, funny, energetic Wood-elf and I'd like him back!

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curiouswombat - 25 Feb 12 - 3:46 PM

Ch. 43: The Black Web

Oh my goodness!  Oh Elrohir - what have you done?  And at what cost?

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AndreaH - 26 Feb 12 - 12:57 PM

Ch. 43: The Black Web

Oh my. Just when Elrohir seems to be getting himself under control this happens. Did Aragorn bring the light of Eärendil?

We're going for the long version I guess...

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Azalais - 26 Feb 12 - 2:58 PM

Ch. 43: The Black Web

Ohhh! That description of the dark spider-web of venom is really gripping - and what an appropriate way to attack an Elf of Mirkwood, of course. Now to hope it's not too late for Aragorn and Gandalf to save Mithrandir!

(And that Gimli can dig Pippin out from, presumably, under a troll...)

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Azalais - 26 Feb 12 - 3:00 PM

Ch. 43: The Black Web

Do'h, I mean for Aragorn and Gandalf to save *Elrohir*, of course. That's what I get for posting without previewing - fingers running ahead of brain!

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Aiwendiel - 27 Feb 12 - 4:06 PM

Ch. 43: The Black Web

Ah, ziggy, you are too cruel! To leave us like this, well, AGAIN! Great description of the web venom-spell, nice depiction of Middle Earth/late bronze age CPR, too... You left a beautiful thread of hope, too, despite the shuddering darkness... Can't wait for more! Wonderful! 

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Aiwendiel - 06 Apr 12 - 11:11 AM

Ch. 44: Chapter 44: Distant Shores

Ahhhh... Such a lucious chapter, a perfectly ambiguous title, by the way; full of tension, hope, despair, and twists of fate. The Gift of the Peredhel a curse indeed. A beautiful touch with the vision of Celebrian. I love -- of course-- your fabulously loving and compassionate Olorin... Really love his regretful longing at the end, I always thought that the "reward" of peace in Valinor would be oh so boring for such a vital spirit as Gandalf... And my instinct that a thread of hope remained after the previous chapter was precisely on target!

Now, will Elrohir answer the call, or continue toward that distant shore? Your readers want to know, and soon! 

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curiouswombat - 08 Apr 12 - 5:51 AM

Ch. 44: Chapter 44: Distant Shores

Oh my goodness... somehow this is all very fitting for Easter... but I am glad that I left it until the third day rather than reading it in the sorrow of Good Friday.

Ah Elrohir - to make your Choice in such a way that you would never have to face your mother again... and so would leave her bereft.

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Tanis - 10 Apr 12 - 1:48 PM

Ch. 44: Chapter 44: Distant Shores

O.M.G.  Wait just a sec whilest I catch my breath before I can write coherently. 

Okay ... Spoilers to follow ... I'd lost track of the new postings on this story and fell behind, so am just catching up this afternoon, but by Illuvatar, Ziggy!  this beats all.  My skin began to crawl in the last chapter and is still doing so. 

The form of your poison takes is ingenious.  That it echos the most hideous form of torture in Mirkwood as well, makes it that much more abhorrent to Legolas and an equisitely refined crucible for Elrohir's redemption.  Though I will freely admit, as a reader, I would not have been unhappy even if he had gone through the door.  It was what I expected, which made the turning that much sweeter.  I would even have been able to accept the elf's following him if that had been the path you chose, because great love, as you've portrayed it throughout this story, knows no boundaries. 

I'm very glad you didn't choose that path!  But I would have followed you - even unto death.  :-) 

Loved the teeny bit of foreshadowing for Elladan's story and I must say again how cleverly you use the device of cutting scenes so the reader moves three steps forward in one character's POV, then takes a step back into another character's POV.  If not done right, that can get tiresome for the reader, but you have honed it to perfection. 

I'm sooooooooo looking forward to the wrap party for this fic!  Can't wait to see this AU resolves itself!

tanis

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AndreaH - 23 Apr 12 - 2:34 PM

Ch. 44: Chapter 44: Distant Shores

Hmm, that was torturous and agonizing and now we've got another cliff-hanger.. It is a lovely mix of forward and back, from tent to tent.

Poor Gimli is hanging there too, waiting with even less hope than us. Post soon, please?

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Erulisse - 01 May 12 - 3:44 AM

Ch. 44: Chapter 44: Distant Shores

Finally got through Chapter 44 - have I told you lately that you are simply magnificant?  This is a simply amazing story and you have fleshed it out so very well.  I see that you say one or two more chapters.  After you have posted those and have declared this complete, I'm going to slap it on my NookColor and read it through without the time gaps.  It will be wondrous. 

- Erulisse (one L)

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curiouswombat - 13 May 12 - 12:32 PM

Ch. 45: Chapter 45 Pipeweed and Tall Tales

I will start at the end - I know just what you mean in your notes - last chapters often become longer and longer until the only answer is to make them the last two, or even three, chapters.  And I am quite happy for it to take time to conclude properly.

But, of this chapter, I love that quiet scene between Elladan and Legolas, and the conversation, rather heart wrenching though it is, with Olórin. 

But then I also love Legolas helping Frodo find his song.  And his version of 'Gil-Galad'... and I can just imagine what he thought of 'On the shadowed hall of the Elven Realm of Mirkwood.'  Or of 'On the Laws and Customs of the Elves' - which I am sure 'your' Legolas would find as entertaining as 'mine' did!

I look forward to the epilogue - and then to going back and re-reading from the very beginning.

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Aiwendiel - 17 May 12 - 5:06 PM

Ch. 45: Chapter 45 Pipeweed and Tall Tales

Another stunning chapter. I particularly love your Gandalf/Olorin here. What an interesting and completely sensible idea that he would also have Sea-Longing! Legolas gradually healing... Pippin and Gimli, wonderfully in character... Frail, gentle Frodo... And the interaction between Elladan and Legoloas is perfect. As is, of course, fit scene between the reawakening Elrohir and finally, Legolas. Terrific work, lyrical language, as usual. Can't wait for the epilogue! 

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Tanis - 20 May 12 - 6:48 PM

Ch. 45: Chapter 45 Pipeweed and Tall Tales

Oh how I'm going to miss the inexpressible joy of opening my email and finding I have another chapter of SoT to savor like a good round of pipeweed!  I've probably said before, if I'd been more conversant with how things work in this fandom and realized this was a WIP, I would never have started reading it. I don't do WIPs anymore because so many times, the muse decamps and the story sits unfinished in moldering decay.  And while I understand, now, how and why this happens, and I know it's as discouraging for the writer as the raeder - it's still an unfinished story.  So thank you, Ziggy, for sticking with this and taking us with you on this journey all the way to The End. 

I have often felt like Bilbo, never knowing what will happen when I step out my door onto this ribbon of road you've unwound for us, but I've spent many, many, many happy hours speculating on what might be around the next bend.  Thank you for that as well, and Anarithilien too! 

How gently this chapter brought us home and grounded us again in the beauty of Middle-earth.  You have opened the box so the magic of renewal - both of a beautiful spring and of the hearts of everything and everyone in the story - pours forth like a fountain.  Yes, there is a touch of despair, but that irrepressible joy you have imbued your Legolas with still bubbles beneath, so that we know he will never let it break it him.  That he will live fiercely with his beloved for whatever time is given to him, and fight, with every fomidable weapon he can bring to bear, to keep Elrohir at his side throughout eternity. 

I'm in awe of what you've done here, Ziggy.  I've printed this out chapter by chapter and it is still my favorite bedtime reading.  It outgrew its first notebook and has moved twice since then, to larger and larger ring-binders.   And I do not think anyone will ever top your Legolas in my faves list. 

So it's with mixed feelings that I look forward to the final chapter.  Part of me can't wait to see how you end it, and part of me doesn't want it to ever end. 

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AndreaH - 12 Jun 12 - 1:53 PM

Ch. 46: Submission

Ziggy, Ah, how lovely an ending. I particularly liked the sharing of confessions; Legolas has them too of course. As do all of the Fellowship I imagine.

It was fascinating to read as you wrote, and now I'll have to go back and read from the beginning again to appreciate the totality of your tale. Thank you. AndreaH

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curiouswombat - 12 Jun 12 - 2:29 PM

Ch. 46: Submission

Ah... a very, very, suitable final chapter.  And how fitting that Legolas  was able to ask the right questions and help Elrohir finally find his own absolution - Legolas who has dwelt in the shadow for so very long himself. 

It has been a wonderful road we have travelled with you here - and I look forward to the epilogue - even if the vibes between Elladan and Imrahil worry me for Elladan's  future choices...Frown

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lisse - 14 Jun 12 - 5:19 AM

Ch. 46: Submission

Ziggy

Wonderful! The end was greater than I expected. I loved that Gandolf took a seat in Elrohir's chair. He knows Elro is not made of glass.

 

I think Elrohir's confession to Legolas was the most heart wrenching he has gone through. He was just so afraid. And I loved Legolas' reaction. That he too had dark horrible thoughts and had to fight them. I remember back in chapter 10 this same theme was featured. L8 and I talked about the nature of evil for a few hours as a result if I remember correctly. You have captured and written about the slithering  things in all of our minds that scurry under a rock when someone comes too near. It is the nature of higher beings to be attracted and repelled by darkness. You have given us a case study in Elrohir of our own base nature. If your story makes people uncomfortable it is just that it has struck a chord.  And truly good art makes a person feel something deeply, stirs us to wakefulness regarding things that are beautiful perhaps, but also things that are ugly. Your story has stayed with me for days after reading a chapter, and that is rare, happening with only a one or two other authors.

 

I love the scene in which Elrohir watches Legolas from afar during the celebration of the hobbit's  awakening. I really don't know how they waited this long. Your descriptions of Legolas physically throughout this chapter make me see him more clearly than ever and he is quite a gorgeous sight. Oh dear and Elrohir clutching handfuls of grass and dirt! That subtle little description leaves one with all sorts of yummy things to imagine about these beyond beautiful creatures! Your slash was as bold as I have read from you and I must say you do it very well. I love nasty full on slash and think you should write it as often as possible.

 

Again, many thanks for the hours of entertainment and for the deeper threads of gold in your masterpiece that are so thought provoking.

 

I am sad this is the end of your story of Legolas and the Ring War, but I know you will write more and your rewrite of Songs of Rohan does help ease us away from Sons.

 

Love and Hugs, Candy

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Aiwendiel - 14 Jun 12 - 2:06 PM

Ch. 46: Submission

Oh, bless me this is a truly fitting ending for a delightful, lusty, passionate and thrilling tale! Mahal's balls, you've got such a touch with these characters -- absolutely true to canon but so richly enhanced by your vision. As I've said many times, I am completely besotted by your Legolas, Elrohir, Elladan, Gimli, Pippin, and of course your wonderful warm wise Gandalf. Thank you so very much for months of enjoyable reading... and now I will have to read it all again! 

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Tanis - 18 Jun 12 - 4:07 PM

Ch. 46: Submission

ohhhhhhhhhh ... oh oh oh ... such sad words, the end.  I've spent, I think, almost two years following this story, for there were only a few chapters written when I first stumbled upon it in my first months wandering the Rings fandom.  And many long, lovely hours sharpening my sagacity as I attempted to follow and discern the weavings of your mind, Ziggy. 

Congratulations, my friend!  You've accomplished a feat few fan fiction authors manage - finishing a novel-length story without ever losing the focus of the main thread, and giving closure to the story line in a wonderfully beatific manner, yet without becoming sappy.  If you were here on my side of the pond, standing next to me, I would give you a well-dserved pat on the back.  But since you're not, you will have to pat yourself on the back from me.  Kudo's, Ziggy, for your awesomeness.

So, things I loved about this final chapter:  that the entire chapter featured benedictions of the most holy sort - the gift of insight that allowed Legolas to lead Elrohir to finding his own forgiveness (beautifully done, mon ami); Elrohir's turning upon the spindle of fate so he knows his own mind at last and his willing submission to the force of that unstinting love; the little peeks back into what came before so that as a reader I felt wrapped up in the whole fic again, reminded of the pleasure I took in reading each chapter as it came to me;  the excerpts from the book in this last chapter that tied the whole fic into canon and made it - for me - a huge part of my fanon canon; the couple of intense and beautifully wrought love scenes; and as always - everything about your Legolas.  Your choice to have him demand submission of Elrohir as a last act of contrition for the pride that ruled the Noldor elf's actions made me wonder again if you're not in the business of mental health.  I thought it fitting that in asking for the yielding, Legolas offered a kind of balm for the acts of agression Elrohir may have only committed in his heart, but longed to reprieve himself of. 

I loved Gandalf and the hobbits, especially your Pippin, who is so adorable in his wisdom and discretion and overinflated sense of self. 

I just loved it start to finish - but then, that goes for the whole story, in addition to this last chapter!

Ahhhhhh, Ziggy, thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for the countless hours of pleasure I've derived from this fic.  For the dreams you've engineered that have lingered beyond the hours of darkness.  For the gift of your words and images that have evoked a sense of Noldor vs Wood elf that I will carry with me forever.  For the inaudible symphony of elven song that will follow me for the rest of my days. 

I'm suspect this will no longer qualify for Mature status over at the MEFA awards, since it now has definite R-rated bits, but know that you are a winner in my book.  The Sons of Thunder will be a standard bearer for me that all other Tolkien fan fic stories will have to measure up to.

hannon le, mellon nin,

tanis

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